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The reason that most individuals are in debt is due to the overuse and irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks should not issue credit cards unless they are completely sure of an individual’s ability to pay back their debts. To what extent do you agree with this?

The reason that most individuals are in debt is due to the overuse and irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks should not issue credit cards unless they are completely sure of an individual’s ability to pay back their debts. BJa2w
Introduction of credit card in the financial system by banks has made the lives of many people much easier. But the difficulty is that mostly people use the credit card recklessly and thus, fell into the debt trap. There is a group of people that holds the opinion that before issuing the card to an individual, banks should investigate about the credit history of that person. I whole heartedly support this point of view, but in my opinion, it may not help always as financial stability of individuals keeps on changing so there is no way for banks to verify the repayment capacity of people. So many people are pushed into the vicious cycle of debt due to irresponsible use of credit card. Still, demand for credit card is upsurging as people consider it a means to improve their lifestyle. As credit cards are easy to use and are acceptable at almost every place, the graph of their usage is increasing exponentially. It is unfortunate that many people do not use them responsibly and fell into the debt cycle. Banks do not issue credit cards unless they are completely satisfied with the financial status of the customers. They always check the credit history of the customers and explain them the burdensome consequences of the debt due to the unwise usage of credit cards. Still, numerous people use credit cards incautiously and fell into the debt trap. So, it is unwise to blame the bank alone for the mistakes of customers. Another factor that should be taken into consideration is the unpredictable nature of a person’s situation as people may lose job or fell ill. In both situations people are unable to pay back the debt so these situations cannot be predicted and are not under the control of neither the individuals nor banks. In the culmination of above discussion, it can be safely said that it is almost impossible to predict the nature of people’s financial situation. People may fell ill or lose job which cannot be predicted by neither bank not individuals.
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much easier.
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recklessly
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,
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into the
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trap. There is a group of
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people
that holds the opinion that
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before
issuing the
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card
to an
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individual
,
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banks
should investigate about the
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history of that person. I whole
heartedly
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in my opinion, it may not
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stability of
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individuals
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on changing
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to verify the repayment capacity of
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people
.

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are pushed
into the vicious cycle of
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due to irresponsible
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use
of
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.
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, demand for
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credit
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card
is upsurging as
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people
consider it a means to
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improve
their lifestyle. As
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credit
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cards
are easy to
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use
and are acceptable at almost every place, the graph of their usage is increasing
exponentially
. It is unfortunate that
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many
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people
do not
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them
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and
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fell
into the
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cycle.

Banks do not issue
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credit
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cards
unless they are completely satisfied with the
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financial
status of the customers. They always
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check
the
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history of the customers and
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explain
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them
the burdensome consequences of the
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debt
due to the unwise usage of
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credit
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cards
.
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, numerous
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people
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use
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incautiously
and
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fell
into the
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debt
trap.
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So
, it is unwise to blame the
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bank
alone for the mistakes of customers.

Another factor that should
be taken
into consideration is the unpredictable nature of a person’s
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situation
as
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people
may lose job or
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fell
ill. In both
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situations
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people
are unable to pay back the
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debt
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so
these
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situations
cannot
be predicted
and are not under the control of neither the
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individuals
nor banks.

In the culmination of above discussion, it can be
safely
said that it is almost impossible to predict the nature of
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people’s
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financial
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situation
.
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may
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fell
ill or lose job which cannot
be predicted
by neither
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bank
not
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individuals
.
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IELTS essay The reason that most individuals are in debt is due to the overuse and irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks should not issue credit cards unless they are completely sure of an individual’s ability to pay back their debts.

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343 words
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