Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The puppy looked at me and I knew I had to help.

The puppy looked at me and I knew I had to help. J3gXj
The puppy looked at me and I knew I had to help. That cute dog was so pitiful and I hoped it wouldn't be taken advantage of by the thieves. So I chased after the thieves on my bicycle and yelled, "There's a dog thief here! Everyone! " Not long after, me and a few others caught the thieves and took them to the police station. The puppy was also brought home. Everyone complimented me and my boss gave me thanks. I was embarrassed but very happy. Fortunately, I made friends with that dog and played together later.
The puppy looked at me and I knew I had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
. That cute dog was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
pitiful and I hoped it wouldn't
be taken
advantage of by the thieves.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I chased after the thieves on my bicycle and yelled,
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
There's a dog thief here! Everyone!
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
Not long after, me and a few others caught the thieves and took them to the police station. The puppy was
also
brought home. Everyone complimented me and my boss gave me thanks. I
was embarrassed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
happy.
Fortunately
, I made friends with that dog and played together later.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay The puppy looked at me and I knew I had to help.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
98 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5band
    The instances of part time jobs have rapidly increased in recent times. Some say that it provides students with valuable experience while others say that it derails the students from studies. "
    It is a common trend for students to work part time these days. I strongly agree with the idea that part time jobs provide these students with experience that benefits them in future as they learn practical skills from an early age. Firstly, students gain a lot of practical skills by working part t...
  • 5band
    The advantages of animals testing/ experinments on animals
    The animals these day are dissappearing ang extincting in wildlife. This is not balance for natural enviroment, affective about the health of people. Besidde, the animlas is very useful for our life, exspecially is medical. It is help us find new drugs and test the exffect it. For example, we can ne...
  • 5band
    It was a lovely warm day when we went to the beach.
    It was a lovely warm day when we went to the beach. All of a sudden, the shops on the beach were quickly closed and we were very confused. I ran over and asked them what was going on and they quickly replied, "We've just received an alert that a tsunami is coming here in three hours so we have to hu...
  • 5.5band
    many people prefer to live in the city, while others like the countryside
    Many people think that living in the city is the best, whereas other people believe that living countryside is the best choose. In my opinion, i prefer to live in the city. There are many reasons why some people like living in the countryside. Firstly, in the countryside, having fresh air will help ...
  • 6band
    Children start to learn English when they turn 3
    For the last few decades, using English in all most children is constantly growing, especially even kids who begin taking the first step to nursery school. There are many reasons relate to the approach of international language of young children. To commence with, English is considered one of the co...
  • 5band
    It is a good time to talk
    It is a good time to talk. I know we connected briefly last week and you'd mentioned needing with your wife since this is an investment. Did you choose to have a chance to discuss? There's no rush on the decision, but the labor day promo we have is almost over so if you want to take full advantage o...





Get more results for topic:
  • The puppy looked at me and I knew I had to help.