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It was a lovely warm day when we went to the beach.

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It was a lovely warm day when we went to the beach. All of a sudden, the shops on the beach were quickly closed and we were very confused. I ran over and asked them what was going on and they quickly replied, "We've just received an alert that a tsunami is coming here in three hours so we have to hurry to get out of here. . " Hearing that I ran back and told my friends and we were ready to go home. Unfortunately, the tsunami came earlier than expected and we didn't get out in time. We were slowly sinking, but one of my friends saw some buoys in the back of the car. Finally, thanks to the buoys, we were lucky to escape and were rescued by the rescue team. It was a breath of fresh air.
It was a lovely warm day when we went to the beach. All of a sudden, the shops on the beach were
quickly
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closed and
we were
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very
confused. I ran over and asked them what was going
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on and
they
quickly
replied,
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We've
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just
received an alert that a tsunami is coming here in three hours
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so
we
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have to
hurry to
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get
out of here.
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.
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"
Hearing that I ran back and
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told
my
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friends and
we were ready to go home. Unfortunately, the tsunami came earlier than
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expected and
we didn't
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get
out in time. We were
slowly
sinking,
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but
one of my friends
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saw
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some
buoys in the back of the car.
Finally
, thanks to the buoys, we were lucky to escape and
were rescued
by the rescue team. It was a breath of fresh air.

IELTS essay It was a lovely warm day when we went to the beach.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
141 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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