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The process of manufacturing tomato ketchup

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The pictures illustrate different stage in the process of manufacturing tomato ketchup. Overall, there are number of stage undertaken, starting with collecting tomatos, through different transportation, cooking and packaging steps and culminating in using in the final stage. The first stage of the process startes when tomatoes is pick and put in basket by farmer, pior to being sorted by hand to classify the good and bad tomatoes. After which, it is transported to the factory by car. Having been remove all skin, seeds and staik, tomatos was put into the container The process continues when tomatoes was crushed in the container and then blend with some spice including sugar, vinegar and salt and that mixture was boiled. After being left in 2 hours, ketchup was pour into the bottle, subsequently it was labelling. Quality of letchup was checked again before being packaged in the box and carried to the supermaket. Finally, ketchup was consumes such as eating with hamburger and fries.
The pictures illustrate
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different
stage in the process of manufacturing tomato ketchup.

Overall
, there are number of stage undertaken, starting with collecting
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tomatos
, through
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different
transportation, cooking and packaging steps and culminating
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in using in
the final stage.

The
first
stage of the process
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startes
when tomatoes
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is
pick and put in basket by farmer,
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pior
to
being sorted
by hand to classify the
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good
and
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bad
tomatoes. After which, it
is transported
to the factory by car. Having been remove all skin, seeds and
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staik
,
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tomatos
was put
into the
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container


The process continues when tomatoes
was crushed
in the container and then blend with
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some
spice including sugar, vinegar and salt and that mixture
was boiled
. After being
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left
in 2 hours, ketchup was
Consider using a past participle here: "poured".
pour
into the bottle,
subsequently
it was labelling. Quality of
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letchup
was
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checked
again
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before
being packaged
in the box and carried to the
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supermaket
.
Finally
, ketchup was consumes such as eating with hamburger and fries.
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IELTS essay The process of manufacturing tomato ketchup

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
162 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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