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The primary purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computers, software, videos, and DVDs. To what extent you agree or disagree. v.1

The primary purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computers, software, videos, and DVDs. v. 1
Some people believe libraries should contain books only, and the government should not waste the assigned budget for public libraries on other digital modes of studying like computers and videos. This essay disagrees with this because these days number of books is available in the digital format and saves time and energy. Firstly, these days, due to modernized computer software and several systems, many books become digitized. People quickly get their favorite books on any computer storage device rather than a paper format. Therefore, I think spending money on computer-related stuff in public libraries will create more space for those books which are too old and can't be digitized. For example, In Beijing, China, over 25% of people, including youngsters, are like to spend their weekend in the public library because they are more enthusiastic about using modern technology which they recently equipped. Secondly, in this modern era, people are more inclined towards the computer, internet, and video format material rather than to read books because it saves more time and energy. In the past, people spend time to walk the aisle to the isle to find the required books or journals. Presently, thanks to digital media, vast collections of books and journals are available on one click rather than walk around the whole library. For instance, according to the survey in California, over 30% of people are happy to get their favorite books on their USP device; instead, they borrowed a heavy paperback book. To summarize, the implementation of modern technology in public libraries is better to use within limited resources. Digital materials attract and inclined more people toward reading, respectively.
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Some
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people
believe libraries should contain
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books
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only
, and the
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government
should not waste the assigned budget for
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public
libraries on other digital modes of studying like computers and videos. This essay disagrees with this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
these days number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
is available in the digital format and saves time and energy.

Firstly
, these days, due to modernized computer software and several systems,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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books
become digitized.
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People
quickly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
their favorite
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books
on any computer storage device
rather
than a paper format.
Therefore
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
spending money on computer-related stuff in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries will create more space for those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
which are too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
and can't
be digitized
.
For example
, In Beijing, China, over 25% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, including youngsters, are like to spend their weekend in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
library
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are more enthusiastic about using modern technology which they recently equipped.

Secondly
, in this modern era,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are more inclined towards the computer, internet, and video format material
rather
than to read
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it saves more time and energy. In the past,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
spend time to walk the aisle to the isle to find the required
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
or journals.
Presently
, thanks to digital media, vast collections of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and journals are available on one click
rather
than walk around the whole library.
For instance
, according to the survey in California, over 30% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
their favorite
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
on their USP device;
instead
, they borrowed a heavy paperback book.

To summarize
, the implementation of modern technology in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries is better to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
within limited resources. Digital materials attract and inclined more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
toward reading,
respectively
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The primary purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computers, software, videos, and DVDs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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