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The presented illustration shows the discrepancy between how 4 groups of people in the UK spend their time doing the housework in hours between 1985 and 2005.

The presented illustration shows the discrepancy between how 4 groups of people in the UK spend their time doing the housework in hours between 1985 and 2005. 7LOln
The presented illustration shows the discrepancy between how 4 groups of people in the UK spend their time doing the housework in hours between 1985 and 2005. From an overall perspective, it has readily been transparent that the number of hours spent on housework of males and females with full-time jobs as well as women with part-time jobs increased in 2 decades. In contrast, unemployed females, which actually accounted for the highest data had their housework time remain undeterred. Firstly, in 1985, females doing part-time works, women doing full-time works, and men having full-time works spend over 5 hours, 2 hours, and 1 hour accomplishing household tasks, respectively. After 10 years, while males possessing full-time employment continued to spend 1 hour doing house-related works, the number of hours spent on housework of females with full-time, and part-time employment dropped moderately around half an hour each. In the last year’s recorded data, women having part-time jobs are responsible for the highest figure among the three with a quarter of a day for household tasks, followed by girls with full-time jobs with less than half of the previous group’s data. The lowest number recorded belonged to males with full-time employment, despite the moderate rise of 30 minutes over the course of 10 years. Additionally, the data recorded from the unemployed girls’ group was the highest one in 1985 with 7 hours a day on average for housework. In the next 10 years, the figure slightly fell to 6 hours and 30 minutes, before continued to climb back to 7 hours in the last year,
The presented illustration
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the discrepancy between how 4 groups of
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people
in the UK spend their time
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doing
the
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housework
in
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hours
between 1985 and 2005.

From an
overall
perspective, it has
readily
been transparent that the number of
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hours
spent on
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housework
of males and
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females
with full-time
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jobs
as well
as women with part-time
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jobs
increased in 2 decades.
In contrast
, unemployed
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females
, which actually accounted for the highest
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data
had their
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housework
time remain undeterred.

Firstly
, in 1985,
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females
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doing
part-time works, women
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doing
full-time works, and
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men
having full-time works spend over 5
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hours
, 2
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hours
, and 1
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hour
accomplishing household tasks,
respectively
. After 10 years, while males possessing full-time employment continued to spend 1
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hour
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doing
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house
-related works, the number of
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hours
spent on
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housework
of
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females
with full-time, and part-time employment dropped
moderately
around half an
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hour
each. In the last
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year’s
recorded
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data
, women having part-time
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jobs
are responsible for the highest figure among the three with a quarter of a day for household tasks, followed by girls with full-time
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jobs
with less than half of the previous group’s
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data
. The lowest number recorded belonged to males with full-time employment, despite the moderate rise of 30 minutes over the course of 10 years.

Additionally
, the
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data
recorded from the unemployed girls’ group was the highest one in 1985 with 7
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hours
a day on average for
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housework
. In the
next
10 years, the figure
slightly
fell to 6
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hours
and 30 minutes,
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before
continued to climb back to 7
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hours
in the last
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year
,
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IELTS essay The presented illustration shows the discrepancy between how 4 groups of people in the UK spend their time doing the housework in hours between 1985 and 2005.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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