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The plans show the change of a small theater in 2010 and 2012

The plans show the change of a small theater in 2010 and 2012 gYyW7

The data sources clearly communicate the transformation of minor theatre during the period from 2010 to 2012. It can be visibly seen that, there was a wide-ranging in the theater with expander in size and more media services and modern facilities In 2010, there was an auditorium, which included 16 chairs, was in front of the stage. Thus, in the top left of this theatre, there was the shortage that next to the media and the stage. Moreover, in the right of the main entrance, there existed a cafe and a ticket office in the left which aligned with the admin office. After two years, while the auditorium remained no changes, the stage was expanded in size and the media was knocked down to construct the hall. Additionally, the shortage was moved to the top right corner and it was replaced by the media which had the showers inside. Besides, the main entrance was extended in size and the admin office was renovated to the northwest. Furthermore, the cafe was demolished and the ticket office was reconstructed to the right of the main entrance. Last but not least, the restaurant was erected on the original site of the ticket office.

The data sources clearly
 communicate the transformation of minor Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.theater
theatre
 during the period from 2010 to 2012.

It can be visibly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 that, there was a wide-ranging in the theater with expander in size and more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewstelevisionradiopublishing
media
 services and modern facilities

In 2010, there was an auditorium, which included 16 chairs, was in front of the stage. Thus
, in the top This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 of this Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.theater
theatre
, there was the shortage that next
 to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewstelevisionradiopublishing
media
 and the stage. Moreover
, in the right of the main entrance, there existed a 'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"café
cafe
 and a ticket You use this word too often, consider replacing it withserviceworkcommissionjobstationplace
office
 in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 which aligned with the admin office.

After two years, while the auditorium remained no This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
, the stage was expanded
 in size and the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewstelevisionradiopublishing
media
was knocked
 down to construct the hall. Additionally
, the shortage was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 to the top right corner and it was replaced
 by the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewstelevisionradiopublishing
media
 which had the showers inside. Besides
, the main entrance was extended
 in size and the admin You use this word too often, consider replacing it withserviceworkcommissionjobstationplace
office
was renovated
 to the northwest. Furthermore
, the 'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"café
cafe
was demolished
 and the ticket You use this word too often, consider replacing it withserviceworkcommissionjobstationplace
office
was reconstructed
 to the right of the main entrance. Last This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 not least, the restaurant was erected
 on the original site of the ticket You use this word too often, consider replacing it withserviceworkcommissionjobstationplace
office
. 