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The plans demonstrate the structure of a ground floor in a museum, comparing the 1990 blueprint with the 2010 blueprint.

The plans demonstrate the structure of a ground floor in a museum, comparing the 1990 blueprint with the 2010 blueprint. 20yX

The plans demonstrate the structure of a ground floor in a museum, comparing the 1990 blueprint with the 2010 blueprint. Overall, it can be observed that there exist several significant changes of the blueprint throughout conversion, construction, and relocation. Amongst the changes, the most significant ones were the children’s interactive zone and the poster display area as substitutes for the archaeology gallery. First of all, one key change is the appearance of the children’s interactive zone and the poster display at the site of the archaeology gallery. Also, a lift was constructed between the gift shop and the natural history room. There used to be only the gift shop, but they expanded the shop by adding a café shop. Another significant change in the 2010 layout is the rearrangement of the reception counter. It was used to be in front of the museum office, but in 2010 it is placed near the entrance, which is expanded on its size comparing to the 1990 one. The statue was placed beside the stair regarding the 1990 blueprint, on the contrary, it is relocated to the middle of the museum 20 years later.

The plans demonstrate the structure of a This word is British English. Did you mean "first floor"?first floor
ground floor
 in a museum, comparing the 1990 blueprint with the 2010 blueprint.

Overall
, it can be observed
 that there exist several significant You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdevelopmentadvanceadjustmentdiversityshifttransition
changes
 of the blueprint throughout conversion, construction, and relocation. Amongst the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdevelopmentadvanceadjustmentdiversityshifttransition
changes
, the most significant ones were the children’s interactive zone and the poster display area as substitutes for the archaeology gallery.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, one key You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdevelopmentadvanceadjustmentdiversityshifttransition
change
 is the appearance of the children’s interactive zone and the poster display at the site of the archaeology gallery. Also
, a lift was constructed
 between the gift shop and the natural history room. There This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 the gift shop, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 they expanded the shop by adding a café shop.

Another significant You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdevelopmentadvanceadjustmentdiversityshifttransition
change
 in the 2010 layout is the rearrangement of the reception counter. It was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to be in front of the museum office, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 in 2010 it is placed
 near the entrance, which is expanded
 on its size comparing to the 1990 one. The statue was placed
 beside the stair regarding the 1990 blueprint, on the contrary
, it is relocated
 to the middle of the museum 20 years later. 