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The plans delow show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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Grange Park was opened in 1920, a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side. There was a fountain in the centre, with a stage for musicians situated centre left, a glasshouse to the right of the Eldon Street entrance and a pond for water plants in the north east corner opposite Around the edges of the park there were rose gardens, with seats nearby for people to smell the flowers and listen to music, The park has altered considerably since then. Now there is one large-ish rose garden occupying the central area where the fountain stood, and with seats all around it. One of the smaller rose gardens remains on the north side of the park. The bandstand (stage for musicians) has also been replaced, by an amphitheatre for concerts and associated seating. The glasshouse has gone and in its places is a water feature; similarly, where the pond for water plants stood there is now a children's play area with a café nearby. Access to the park is still via the two original entrances, but there is now a third entrance near the water feature from an underground car park. Despite the apparently significant changes, the park retains the basic elements of flowers, water, seating and music, with the addition of a café and a children's play area.
Grange
Park
was opened
in 1920, a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue

on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side. There was a fountain in the

centre
, with a stage for musicians situated
centre
left
, a glasshouse to the right of the

Eldon Street entrance and a pond for
water
plants in the
north east
corner opposite

Around the edges of the
park
there were rose gardens, with seats nearby for
people


to smell the flowers and listen to music,

The
park
has altered
considerably
since then.
Now
there is one
large-ish
rose garden

occupying the central area where the fountain stood, and with seats all around it. One

of the smaller rose gardens remains on the north side of the
park
. The bandstand

(stage for musicians) has
also
been replaced
, by an
amphitheatre
for concerts and

associated seating. The glasshouse has gone and in its places is a
water
feature;

similarly
, where the pond for
water
plants stood there is
now
a children's play area

with a café nearby. Access to the
park
is
still
via the two original entrances,
but
there

is
now
a third entrance near the
water
feature from an underground car park.

Despite the
apparently
significant
changes
, the
park
retains the basic elements of

flowers,
water
, seating and music, with the addition of a café and a children's play area.
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IELTS essay The plans delow show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same

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