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Do people learn more from losing than from winning? 26/01/2021

Do people learn more from losing than from winning? 26/01/2021 0AwB1
There has been lately an attempt to teach our society that, we must always win in everything. However, it is impossible stay on the top ranking always. The lose always bring up some lessons. Personally, I completely agree with this statement for three reasons: lose for learn, believe in theirs effort and find the errors. First of all, it is extremely important that the person can learn with the lose. For example, when I was a child I was a good swimmer, so because if this I thought that my workouts were enough. Nevertheless, one day, after has winning some conquests, I lose my first final. I felt too bad, because in my mind, I just to know victory. When I recognized the lose, I started cry. My father since said, son it is impossible keep the on the top, you should not feel safe with your workouts, you should keep you efforts and be humble. Furthermore, the lose is important to the people knowledge their effort or how efforts theirs put in something. For example, when the team can range a final championship, sometimes only that matters is the victory. However, the team should not forget the effort, because whether the victory is reached or not, the effort always will be valued. Also, when the lose appear, we have be able to find the errors and improve. For instance, if the during the year a soccer team put a lot of efforts in strategy, but in the final, this strategy doesn´t work, it is time to review the plan and think in another manner to range the goal. It is work for our social life, student life, work, office, projects, schedule etc. In conclusion, the loses always welcome, in my opinion. Because we always can enjoy something positive. How was said before, keep on the top always, sometimes became us in too safe, “over safe”. The victory is good, but the losing sometimes is better than a victory, we always learn something when we lose something, even if the lose.
There has been lately an attempt to teach our society that, we
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must
always win in everything.
However
, it is impossible stay on the top ranking always. The
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lose
always bring up
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some
lessons.
Personally
, I completely
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with this statement for three reasons:
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for learn, believe in theirs
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and find the errors.

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important
that the person can learn with the
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lose
.
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, when I was a child I was a
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good
swimmer,
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if this I
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thought
that my workouts were
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enough
.
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, one day, after has winning
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some
conquests, I
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lose
my
first
final. I felt too
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bad
,
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because
in my mind, I
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just
to know
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victory
. When I recognized the
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lose
, I
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started
cry. My father since said, son it is impossible
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keep
the on the top, you should not feel safe with your workouts, you should
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keep
you
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efforts
and be humble.

Furthermore
, the
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lose
is
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important
to the
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people
knowledge their
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effort
or how
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theirs put in
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something
.
For example
, when the team can range a final championship,
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sometimes
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only
that matters is the
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victory
.
However
, the team should not forget the
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effort
,
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because
whether the
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victory
is reached
or not, the
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always will
be valued
.

Also
, when the
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lose
appear, we have
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be
able to find the errors and
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improve
.
For instance
, if the during the year a soccer team put
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a lot of
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efforts
in strategy,
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in the final, this strategy
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doesn´t
work, it is time to review the plan and
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in another manner to range the goal. It is work for our social life, student life, work, office, projects, schedule etc.

In conclusion
, the
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loses
always welcome, in my opinion.
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we always can enjoy
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positive
. How
was said
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before
,
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keep
on the top always,
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sometimes
became us in too safe, “over safe”. The
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victory
is
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good
,
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but
the losing
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sometimes
is better than a
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victory
, we always learn
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something
when we
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lose
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something
, even if the
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lose
.
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IELTS essay Do people learn more from losing than from winning? 26/01/2021

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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