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the plan shows the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment

the plan shows the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment BrNw

The question has been given with two model plans of university’s sports centre, which are of today’s and future’s respectively. This essay explains the attributes of the two models as well as differences between them. Overall, we can observe that the outdoor courts of old plan will be extended and transformed as places of various arts as well as sports. the extended place also allows to build business by constructing a café and a sports shop. The amendments also introduced two changing rooms for comforting users. The gym gets expanded in the changes. The old plan consists of free space for the games to be played outside in the east and west directions while. The new one has dance studios, a sports hall, a leisure pool, place of coffee, shops for sports and few other amenities. This expansion allows users to be comfortable as well as productive with the world class facilities.

The question has been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 with two model plans of university’s You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
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centre
, which are of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
’s and future’s respectively
. This essay This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interprets
explains
 the attributes of the two models as well
 as differences between them.

Overall
, we can observe that the outdoor courts of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 plan will be extended
 and transformed as places of various arts as well
 as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterThe
the
 extended place also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorizes
allows
Did you mean "building"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.building
to build
 business by constructing a café and a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 shop. The amendments also
 introduced two changing rooms for comforting users. The gym This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquires
gets
 expanded in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 plan consists of free space for the games to be played
 outside in the east and west directions while. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
 new one has dance studios, a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 hall, a leisure pool, place of coffee, shops for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 and few other amenities. This expansion This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorizes
allows
 users to be comfortable as well
 as productive with the world This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 facilities. 