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The plan below shows a public park

The plan below shows a public park NWjoj
The picture shows the differences of a public park between when it was opened in 1920 and today. Overall there are some parts that built in and some other parts are not available anymore or being replaced as new building. To begin with, in 1920, there is only a tiny stage for the musician with two rose gardens in both sides of the park and for today the stage changes into bigger amphitheatre that can be use for concert with the only rose garden left is the one in the right side of the amphitheatre. Another changes happen to the water fountain that become a square rose garden with seats on each sides. Moreover, there are no more glasshouse at the park but there are water feature instead. The rose garden located in the left side of the entrance from arnold avenue is changed to be a cafe and the pond near it becoming a children's play area. As the last, all the seats from 1920 is no more available.
The picture
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shows
the differences of a public park between when it
was opened
in 1920 and
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today
.

Overall
there are
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some
parts that built in and
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some
other parts are not available anymore or
being replaced
as new building.

To
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begin
with, in 1920, there is
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only
a tiny stage for the musician with two
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rose
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gardens
in both
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sides
of the park and for
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today
the stage
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changes
into bigger
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amphitheatre
that can be
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use
for concert with the
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only
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rose
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garden
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left
is the one
The usual prepositions to use when in contact with the side is "on" not "in". Did you mean "on the right side"?
in the right side
of the
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amphitheatre
. Another
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changes
happen to the water fountain that become a square
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rose
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garden
with seats on each
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "side"?
sides
.
Moreover
, there are no more
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glasshouse
at the park
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but
there are water
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feature
instead
. The
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rose
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garden
located in the
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left
side of the entrance from
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arnold
avenue is
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changed
to be a
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
and the pond near it becoming a children's play area. As the last, all the seats from 1920 is no more available.

IELTS essay The plan below shows a public park

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
170 words
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4.0
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