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The pie charts below show the proportion of energy produced by different sources in one country in 1985 and 2003. v.1

The pie charts below show the proportion of energy produced by different sources in one country in 1985 and 2003. v. 1
Paying taxes is the responsibility of each citizen of a country. People have different approaches towards contributing to the society. Some assume that paying taxes is sufficient, whereas others contradict that we should do more than just paying taxes. This essay will discuss both views to give an opinion. Firstly, some people believe that by paying taxes they will contribute towards the development of the nation and it will be used by the government to develop health-care and educational institutes for their citizens which will be used to help people who are in need. For instance, many developed countries provide free education and medical facilities for the needy from the taxes paid by the people of the country. So some think that, by paying taxes they have contributed more to the development of the nation. On the other hand, some people believe that they have more social responsibilities than just paying taxes. Some of them are by donating to government relief funds at the time of crisis or any health pandemic to help the country recover from the loss. For example, in some countries during crisis, many people contributed to the prime minister's relief fund which was used by the government to provide shelter and food for the people stranded in isolated places. Some people believe that, we should have more responsibilities towards the development of our society. To conclude, paying taxes is the duty of every responsible citizen. In my opinion, I strongly believe that people should have more social responsibility towards their society than just paying taxes.
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is sufficient, whereas others contradict that we should do more than
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. This essay will discuss both views to give an opinion.

Firstly
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they will contribute towards the development of the nation and it will be
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by the
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to develop health-care and educational institutes for their citizens which will be
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developed
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they have contributed more to the development of the nation.

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that they have more social
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than
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of them are by donating to
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relief funds at the time of crisis or any health pandemic to
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the
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recover from the loss.
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some
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countries
during crisis,
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many
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people
contributed to the prime minister's relief fund which was
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used
by the
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government
to provide shelter and food for the
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people
stranded in isolated places.
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people
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that, we should have more
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towards the development of our society.

To conclude
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is the duty of every responsible citizen. In my opinion, I
strongly
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should have more social
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towards their society than
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The pie charts below show the proportion of energy produced by different sources in one country in 1985 and 2003. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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