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The pie chart and table gives information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v.2

The pie chart and table gives information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v. 2
The pie chart and table chart shows the amount of seafood imported to the US by different three nations and the total value of fish in billion dollars from 1988 and 2000. As an overview, the highest amount of seafood imported to US by Canada in the first year which replaced by other nations in the last year. Whereas, the estimate value of fish was highest in the last year. It is clear from the chart that, 60% of the seafood imported to US by Canada in the first year which was almost a quarter in the next four years. While, it recorded as 28% in the 2000. However, China 13% of fish imported to US in the 1988 and it was almost one-fifth in the year 1992 an it increased by 10% in the next eight years. Further, 27% of the seafood exported by US from other nations with 46% and 42% in the next years. Moving towards the table chart, the total value of fish was greatest in the year 2000 with 10. 72 billion dollars which ranged between 6. 54 and 8. 52 billion dollars in the year 1988 and 1992. To sum up, there was increase in the total value of fish with the increasing year. Whereas, the amount of seafood imported by China and Canada decreased with increasing year in comparison to other nations.
The pie
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chart
and table
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chart
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shows
the amount of seafood
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imported
to the US by
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different
three
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nations
and the total
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value
of fish in
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billion
dollars
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from 1988 and 2000
. As an overview, the highest amount of seafood
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imported
to US by Canada in the
first
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year
which replaced by other
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nations
in the last
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year
.
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Whereas
, the estimate
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value
of fish was highest in the last year.

It is
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clear
from the
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chart
that, 60% of the seafood
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imported
to US by Canada in the
first
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year
which was almost a quarter in the
next
four years.
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While
, it recorded as 28% in the 2000.
However
, China 13% of fish
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imported
to US in the 1988 and it was almost one-fifth in the
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year
1992
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an it
increased by 10% in the
next
eight years.
Further
, 27% of the seafood exported by US from other
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nations
with 46% and 42% in the
next
years.

Moving towards the table
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chart
, the total
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value
of fish was greatest in the
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year
2000 with 10. 72 billion dollars which ranged between 6. 54 and 8. 52 billion dollars in the
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year
1988 and 1992.

To sum up, there was increase in the total
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value
of fish with the increasing
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year
. Whereas, the amount of seafood
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imported
by China and Canada decreased with increasing
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year
in comparison
to other
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nations
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay The pie chart and table gives information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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