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The pictures illustrate the improvement of simple cooking equipment.

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The pictures illustrate the improvement of simple cooking equipment. Overall, the equipment used for cooking has been developed more complex than the old one. However, the modern equipment was more complete. The cooking equipment in picture A looked like a vase heated by the fire surrounded by stone. In picture B there was a small cylinder clay shield that contained firewood for heating. The equipment in picture A was bigger than the body of picture 2. This small cylinder shield in picture B was smaller and simpler in design, measuring less than the half size of the one in picture A. The equipment that appeared in picture C was more modern than the two others. It consists of a handle, metal and a door for air. The equipment in picture B was only a fraction of the size of the equipment in picture C. The lining surrounded the cooker was made of clay and it connected to the metal bottom. The cooker in picture C had a door for air contains two paths, one was for air and another was ash.
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illustrate the improvement of simple cooking equipment.

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, the
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equipment
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been developed
more complex than the
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one.
However
, the modern
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equipment
was more complete.

The cooking
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in
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A looked like a vase heated by the fire surrounded by stone. In
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B there was a
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small
cylinder clay shield that contained firewood for heating. The
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equipment
in
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picture
A was bigger than the body of
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picture
2. This
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small
cylinder shield in
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B was smaller and simpler in design, measuring less than the half size of the one in
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picture
A.

The
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equipment
that appeared in
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C was more modern than the two others. It consists of a handle, metal and a door for air. The
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equipment
in
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B was
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only
a fraction of the size of the
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in
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C. The lining surrounded the cooker
was made
of clay and it connected to the metal bottom. The cooker in
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C had a door for air contains two paths, one was for air and another was ash.
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IELTS essay The pictures illustrate the improvement of simple cooking equipment.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
181 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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