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The picture illustrates information about how to manufacture carbonated drinks.

The picture illustrates information about how to manufacture carbonated drinks. Looking at the picture, it is immediately apparent that there are five main stages in producing carbonated drinks. The process begins with cleaning the water and ends at the packaging stage. At the first stage of producing carbonated drinks, the water from households is cleaned by filtering and then softening in chemical materials. After this stage has been completed, the water is pumped into a heater, which is powered by electricity, then it is cooled through a small pipe. During this process, carbon dioxide from another tube is added to the water. Then the water goes through a small long pipe to a tank, in which it is mixed with coloring, syrup, and flavor materials and filtered for the second time before being filled into bottles and cans. Finally, these carbonated drinks are packed into boxes, and they are delivered to supermarkets to sell them to customers.
The picture illustrates information about how to manufacture
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carbonated
drinks.

Looking at the picture, it is immediately apparent that there are five main stages in producing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
carbonated
drinks. The process
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begins
with cleaning the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
and ends at the packaging stage.

At the
first
stage of producing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
carbonated
drinks, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
from households
is cleaned
by filtering and then softening in chemical materials. After this stage has
been completed
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
is pumped
into a heater, which
is powered
by electricity, then it
is cooled
through a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
pipe. During this process, carbon dioxide from another tube is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to the water.

Then the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
goes through a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
long pipe to a tank, in which it
is mixed
with coloring, syrup, and flavor materials and filtered for the second time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
being filled
into bottles and cans.

Finally
, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
carbonated
drinks
are packed
into boxes, and they
are delivered
to supermarkets to sell them to customers.
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IELTS essay The picture illustrates information about how to manufacture carbonated drinks.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
157 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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