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The picture describes how to make olive oil

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The picture describes how to make olive oil It is clear that there are 7 steps in the olive oil process. The process starts with the picking the olives from olive trees and ends with the storage and sale At the first stage of the process, the olives are picked. After that, there are rinsed with cold water and belted. Then, the mixture is smashed into olive paste and olive stones, but the olive stones are not used The next stage is the olive paste are put in bag with holes and pressed to liquid mixture. The sixth stage involves separating this mixture into oil and water. Finally, the end products are stored and sold
The picture
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describes
how to
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make
olive oil

It is
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clear
that there are 7 steps in the olive oil process. The process
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starts
with the picking the
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olives
from olive trees and ends with the storage and
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sale


At the
first
stage of the process, the
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olives
are picked
. After that, there
are rinsed
with
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cold
water and belted. Then, the mixture
is smashed
into olive paste and olive stones,
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but
the olive stones are not
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used


The
next
stage is the olive paste
are put
in bag with holes and pressed to liquid mixture. The sixth stage involves separating this mixture into oil and water.
Finally
, the
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end
products
are stored
and sold

IELTS essay The picture describes how to make olive oil

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
114 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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