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The person you impressed with

The person you impressed with 706qb
Everyone have their one or maybe thousand people to impressed with, but mine is just only one person is my mother. She is my ideal model, in both work and family. First of all, my mother is not only a mom but she also is a friend that we can confide, a chief, architect and a wonder woman. Although her work busy, she always got home on time and make sure that we have been well fed. And when something in my home damaged she will fix it and make it new in no time, just like magic. Second, her career is unquestionable, always wanted to study as high as possible is what I am very impressed with. She known to treat kindly with everyone else and that is why everyone loved her. Finally, she always love me for who I am, not mattered that I am disruptive or have a bad point, she always forgive me and tell me trying hard the next time. My mother is always and the only person I love the most and impressed the most.
Everyone
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their one or maybe thousand
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to impressed with,
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mine is
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one person is my mother. She is my ideal model, in both work and family.
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First of all
, my mother is not
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only
a mom
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but
she
also
is a friend that we can confide, a chief, architect and a wonder woman. Although her work busy, she always
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got
home on time and
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make
sure that we have been
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well fed
. And when something in my home damaged she will
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fix
it and
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make
it new in no time,
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just
like magic. Second, her career is unquestionable, always wanted to study as high as possible is what I am
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very
impressed with. She
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known
to treat kindly with everyone else and
that is
why everyone
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loved
her.
Finally
, she always
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love
me for who I am, not mattered that I am disruptive or have a
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bad
point, she always
The pronoun 'she' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "forgives", "forgave".
forgive
me and
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tell
me trying
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hard
the
next
time. My mother is always and the
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only
person I
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love
the most and impressed the most.
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IELTS essay The person you impressed with

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
181 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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