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The passage talks against the commercial trade of the fossils to private owners, and the lecturer totally disagrees with that and thinks that benefits of the commercial trade of the fossils outweigh the disadvantages.

The passage talks against the commercial trade of the fossils to private owners, and the lecturer totally disagrees with that and thinks that benefits of the commercial trade of the fossils outweigh the disadvantages. 8502P
The passage talks against the commercial trade of the fossils to private owners, and the lecturer totally disagrees with that and thinks that benefits of the commercial trade of the fossils outweigh the disadvantages. Firstly, the article describes, how private trade of fossils instead of donating in the museums, reduces the interest in general public regarding the fossils. However, the lecturer argues that commercial fossils trades enhances their purchases by public schools and libraries, which indeed make it more accessible to the general public. Secondly, the passage asserts that, the commercial trade make it harder for scientists to know about the facts regarding extinction of the live forms of the fossils. However, the lecturer refutes the argument. According to him, it is unrealistic to believe scientific disadvantage of commercial trade because, scientist always required to value and identification of the fossil before it's trade. Trade of the fossil is only possible after detailed examination and identification by a scientific professional. Moreover, the article gives an explanation how the commercial fossil collectors destroy the valuable scientific evidences by destroying their positions and immediate surroundings. On the other hand, the lecturer argues that, without those discoveries by commercial collectors, it could not be possible to know about some extinct species. Additionally, collectors made it possible to discover the fossils. Therefore, it is better to have an idea about of those fossils regardless of the minute details like position and situation.
The passage talks against the
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trade
of the
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fossils
to private owners, and the
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lecturer
totally
disagrees with that and
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thinks
that benefits of the
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commercial
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trade
of the
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fossils
outweigh the disadvantages.

Firstly
, the article
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describes
, how private
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trade
of
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fossils
instead
of donating in the museums,
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reduces
the interest in
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general public
regarding the
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fossils
.
However
, the
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lecturer
argues that
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commercial
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fossils
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trades
enhances their
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purchases
by public schools and libraries, which
indeed
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make
it more accessible to the
Consider using "public".
general public
.

Secondly
, the passage asserts that, the
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commercial
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trade
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make
it harder for scientists to know about the facts regarding extinction of the
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live
forms of the
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fossils
.
However
, the
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lecturer
refutes the argument. According to him, it is unrealistic to believe scientific disadvantage of
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commercial
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trade
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because
, scientist always required to value and identification of the
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fossil
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before
it's
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trade
.
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Trade
of the
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fossil
is
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only
possible after detailed examination and identification by a scientific professional.

Moreover
, the article gives an explanation how the
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commercial
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fossil
collectors
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destroy
the valuable scientific evidences by destroying their positions and immediate surroundings.
On the other hand
, the
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lecturer
argues that, without those discoveries by
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commercial
collectors, it could not be possible to know about
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some
extinct species.
Additionally
, collectors made it possible to discover the
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fossils
.
Therefore
, it is better to have an
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idea
about of those
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fossils
regardless of the minute
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details
like position and situation.
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IELTS essay The passage talks against the commercial trade of the fossils to private owners, and the lecturer totally disagrees with that and thinks that benefits of the commercial trade of the fossils outweigh the disadvantages.

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