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The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. v.14

The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. v. 14
The human being, due to the globalisation, undoubtedly have experienced a rapid change in recent years and that has impacted the way people live, interact and value old traditions to name aq few. In the bygone days, citizens adhered to the traditional ways of life and old ideas about how to face life in a different circumstance. But now, it is assumed that these ways are not very utilitarian for the adolescents in entering the modern life. Personally, I quite agree with the statement that these old ideas are not helpful in preparing the new generation to face an ever changing world in most of the cases and I have some reasons to support it which are explained in the following paragraphs. It is believed by many that technology in the past was not as same as it is right now. This made the older generations to usually learnt how to live, think and behave in the society through the available books or by the parents and teachers.   On the contrary, now, the youngsters can learn those from provided technology such as television and the internet. This causes the idea created among them are very different in which the oldest usually has traditional thinking. For instance, the old generation has an inclination to the early marriage which is no longer a better option in modern society. The older generation also despised the use of modern technology which is quite opposite among the modern generations. On the other hand, nowadays, the world seems like experiencing an alteration not only in technology but also in the way people solve the occurring problem. To illustrate, the older are likely to cope the issues with sitting together and discussing but now some of the youngers have a tendency to deal with that problem via technology offered like telephone, the internet etc. This illustration makes clear that modern life is likely to use modern idea also. There is no harm in adopting and following good traditions but if that restricts the new generation from exploring potential areas, that should be avoided. For example respecting someone senior is a tradition is that young generation should still follow but accepting superstitious ideas and old traditions that deter new generations to proceed ahead should be avoided by all means. Since the people from past generation had been surrounded by the older traditions and they do not easily accept changes, I would say most of their ideas are not helpful for the upbringing and preparing a new generation to face a whole list of new challenges in life that were not present in the past. In a nutshell, because the older generation lived in a different time and faced different types of challenges in life from that of the youngsters today, they tend to have very traditional ways to live their life and ideas which seem not convenient anymore to be utilised in the new era.
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,
undoubtedly
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change
in recent years and that has impacted the
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way
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people
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live
, interact and value
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old
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traditions
to name
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ways
of
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life
and
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old
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ideas
about how to face
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life
in a
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different
circumstance.
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But
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now
, it
is assumed
that these
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ways
are not
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very
utilitarian for the adolescents in entering the
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modern
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life
.
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, I quite
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agree
with the statement that these
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old
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ideas
are not helpful in preparing the
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new
generation to face an
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ever changing
world in most of the cases and I have
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some
reasons to support it which are
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explained
in the following paragraphs.

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is believed
by
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many
that
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technology
in the past was not as same as it is right
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now
. This made the
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older
generations to
usually
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learnt
how to
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live
,
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think
and behave in the society through the available books or by the parents and teachers.
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On the contrary
,
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now
, the youngsters can learn those from provided
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technology
such as television and the internet. This causes the
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idea
created among them are
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very
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different
in which the oldest
usually
has traditional thinking.
For instance
, the
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old
generation has an inclination to the early marriage which is no longer a better option in
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modern
society. The
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older
generation
also
despised the
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use
of
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modern
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technology
which is quite opposite among the
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modern
generations.

On the other hand
, nowadays, the world seems like experiencing an alteration not
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only
in
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technology
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but
also
in the
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way
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people
solve the occurring problem. To illustrate, the
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older
are likely to cope the issues with sitting together and discussing
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but
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now
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some of the
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a tendency to deal with that problem via
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technology
offered like telephone, the internet etc. This illustration
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makes
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clear
that
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modern
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life
is likely to
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use
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modern
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idea
also
. There is no harm in adopting and following
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good
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traditions
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but
if that restricts the
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new
generation from exploring potential areas, that should
be avoided
.
For example
respecting someone senior is a
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tradition
is that young generation should
still
follow
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but
accepting superstitious
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ideas
and
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old
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traditions
that deter
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new
generations to proceed ahead should
be avoided
by all means. Since the
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people
from past generation had
been surrounded
by the
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older
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traditions and
they do not
easily
accept
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changes
, I would say most of their
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ideas
are not helpful for the upbringing and preparing a
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new
generation to face a whole list of
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new
challenges in
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life
that were not present in the past.

In a nutshell,
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because
the
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older
generation
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lived
in a
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different
time and faced
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different
types of challenges in
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life
from that of the youngsters
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today
, they tend to have
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very
traditional
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ways
to
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live
their
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life
and
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ideas
which seem not convenient anymore to be
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utilised
in the
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era.
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IELTS essay The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
488 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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