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The number of cars has increased significantly in major cities. What problems does this cause and what are some solutions to these problems?

Nowadays cars have become a basic necessity in our day to day life and hence their number has grown large especially in metro cities.  This enormous increase in four wheelers has led to various problems. This essay will discuss some of the problems associated with this issue and put forward some solutions for the same. The first and foremost problem caused by the increase in the number of cars is traffic congestion in metro cities. Because cars have become cheap more and more people are buying them and this in turn leads to more traffic. Tata Nano launched by Tata motors in India in year 2000 has helped a large number of middle class families to own their car. The second problem linked with on road cars is air pollution which causes health hazards at a high rate. Air quality in metro cities has degraded so badly that it is very difficult to breathe in these urban areas. A survey conducted by the government of; always write the government of Delhi in year 2015 showed increased number of asthma patients due to poor air quality. Solutions to the aforementioned problems / the problems discussed above could be to improve the quality of public transportation so that people will prefer to opt for metro or bus services instead of their private vehicles. Secondly there should be a ban on vehicles causing air pollution above a threshold value. The government should impose heavy fines on people breaking these norms. To conclude, the increase in the number of cars causes air pollution and traffic congestion in cities. Improving the reliability of public transport is the best possible solution to this problem.
Nowadays
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cars
have become a basic necessity in our
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day to day
life and
hence
their
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number
has grown large
especially
in
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metro
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cities
.  This enormous increase in four wheelers has led to various
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problems
. This essay will discuss
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some of the
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problems
associated with this issue and put forward
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some
solutions for the same.

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first
and foremost
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problem
caused by the increase in the
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number
of
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cars
is traffic congestion in
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metro
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cities
.
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Because
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cars
have become
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cheap
more and more
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people
are buying them and this in turn leads to more traffic. Tata
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Nano
launched by
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Tata motors
in India in year 2000 has
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helped
a large
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number
of middle
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class
families to
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own
their car.

The second
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problem
linked with on road
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cars
is
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air
pollution which causes health hazards at a high rate.
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Air
quality in
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metro
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cities
has degraded
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so
badly
that it is
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very
difficult to breathe in these urban areas. A survey conducted by the
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government
of; always write the
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government
of Delhi in year 2015
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showed
increased
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number
of asthma patients due to poor
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air
quality.

Solutions to the aforementioned
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problems
/ the
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problems
discussed above could be to
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improve
the quality of public transportation
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so
that
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people
will prefer to opt for
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metro
or bus services
instead
of their private vehicles.
Secondly
there should be a ban on vehicles causing
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air
pollution above a threshold value. The
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government
should impose heavy fines on
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people
breaking these norms.

To conclude
, the increase in the
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number
of
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cars
causes
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air
pollution and traffic congestion in
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cities
. Improving the reliability of public transport is the best possible solution to this
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problem
.
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IELTS essay The number of cars has increased significantly in major cities. What problems does this cause and what are some solutions to these problems?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
278 words
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