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The natural resources such as oil, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we serve these problems?

Nowadays, consumption of natural resources has been increasing at fast pace. The aim of this essay is to discuss about the various factors responsible for their usage and to put forward a number of effective solutions to combat this problem. There are two reasons for the excessive use of oil and fresh water. Firstly, usage of vehicles is increasing day by day. Furthermore, the population goes on increasing rapidly, therefore, raising the demand of vehicles. For instance, everyone prefers to travel in their own vehicles for their daily routine work. As a result, it would lead to consumption of more oil in form of petrol and diesel that eventually causes air pollution. Secondly, people are not aware of the importance of water leading to its wastage in their daily activities at home. For example, unreasonable usage of water while brushing of teeth, Gardening, bathing, washing of utensils and clothes, as they forgot to close tap. These Circumstances are causing a considerable amount of loss of natural resources. One approach is to use government transport like buses, and trains. Apart from that people can go for car pooling which will decrease the required number of automobiles as well as air pollution. Another approach is to guide the public regarding proper usage of fresh water by closing tap when water is not required. To limit the quantity of water, one can preserve the water needed for household chores and reutilise it in gardening as well as while cleaning the house. These above measures will ensure that the natural reasources can be saved from their exorbitant use. In conclusion, this essay highlighted that reasons behind this happening are excessive use of motor vehicles and unreasonable usage of fresh water. This essay also presented that solutions to this issue are twofold: adpoting public transport instead of private ones and limit the usage of fresh water.
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pace. The aim of this essay is to
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discuss about the
various factors responsible for their
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and to put forward a number of effective solutions to combat this problem.

There are two reasons for the excessive
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use
of oil and
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.
Firstly
,
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usage
of
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vehicles
is increasing day by day.
Furthermore
, the population goes on increasing
rapidly
,
therefore
, raising the demand of
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, everyone prefers to travel in their
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for their daily routine work.
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, it would lead to consumption of more oil in form of petrol and diesel that
eventually
causes air pollution.
Secondly
,
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people
are not aware of the importance of
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water
leading to its wastage in their daily activities at home.
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usage
of
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while brushing of teeth, Gardening, bathing, washing of utensils and clothes, as they forgot to close tap. These Circumstances are causing a considerable amount of loss of natural resources.

One approach is to
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transport like buses, and trains. Apart from that
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can go for
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car pooling
which will decrease the required number of automobiles
as well
as air pollution. Another approach is to guide the public regarding proper
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usage
of
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fresh
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by closing tap when
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is not required. To limit the quantity of
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water
, one can preserve the
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water
needed for household chores and
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it in gardening
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as while cleaning the
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. These above measures will ensure that the natural
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can
be saved
from their exorbitant
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.

In conclusion
, this essay highlighted that reasons behind this happening are excessive
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use
of motor
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vehicles
and unreasonable
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of
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fresh
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. This essay
also
presented that solutions to this issue are twofold:
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adpoting
public transport
instead
of private ones and limit the
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usage
of
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fresh
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water
.
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IELTS essay The natural resources such as oil, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we serve these problems?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.0
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