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Nowadays, with the advancement of technology, people can work and live anywhere they want. Do its advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In this era of digitalisation, technology has become a crucial part of our lives now. It is close to a nightmare imagining a day without the use of technology. With the advent of new apps everyday, everything and anything is made accessible to us with click of a button. While we talk about the lives becoming easier to operate we cannot ignore the repercussions of technology. Lives were complicated in 90s, but the technology has made it simpler now. With laptops and mobile phones it has become easier to function from remote places as well. For example, during the pandemic when going to offices were restricted and people had to work from home, the transition was not at all an uphill battle because of the technological advancement. Furthermore, the schools were shut, but the classes were still going on with the help of apps like Zoom and Google Teams. Also, with the upcoming of different apps like nestaway and oyo, finding a place to live is not at all difficult now. With nestaway you can find rooms and sharing flats by using your phones. The distances are reduces with the apps like uber and ola which makes allows us to live anywhere we like. But having said that there are various disadvantages of the technology as well, with the upcoming of social media, the physical movement has been curbed and the mental health is getting deterioted every day. Teenageers are suffering from depression, anxiety and bipolar disorders because of the superficial world projected by social media. To sum up, I would say that technology is the need of the hour, but we should be vary while using it. We cannot imagine a life without the technology so we need to optimally use it to reduce the disadvantages and augment the perks.
In this era of
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digitalisation
,
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technology
has become a crucial part of our
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lives
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now
. It is close to a nightmare imagining a day without the
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use
of
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technology
. With the advent of new apps
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everyday
, everything and anything
is made
accessible to us with click of a button.
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While
we talk about the
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lives
becoming easier to operate we cannot
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ignore
the repercussions of technology.

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Lives
were complicated
in 90s,
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but
the
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technology
has made it simpler
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now
. With laptops and mobile phones it has become easier to function from remote places
as well
.
For example
, during the pandemic when going to offices
were restricted
and
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people
had to work from home, the transition was not at all an uphill battle
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because
of the technological advancement.
Furthermore
, the schools
were shut
,
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but
the classes were
still
going on with the
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help
of apps like Zoom and Google Teams.

Also
, with the
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upcoming
of
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different
apps like
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nestaway
and
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oyo
, finding a place to
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live
is not at all difficult
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now
. With
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nestaway
you can find rooms and sharing flats by using your phones. The distances are
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reduces
with the apps like
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uber
and
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ola
which
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makes
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allows
us to
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live
anywhere we like.

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But
having said that there are various disadvantages of the
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technology
as well
, with the
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upcoming
of social media, the physical movement has
been curbed
and the mental health is getting
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deterioted
every day.
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Teenageers
are suffering from depression, anxiety and bipolar disorders
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because
of the superficial world projected by social media.

To sum up, I would say that
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technology
is the need of the hour,
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but
we should be
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vary
while using it.

We cannot imagine a life without the
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technology
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so
we need to
optimally
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use
it to
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reduce
the disadvantages and augment the perks.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, with the advancement of technology, people can work and live anywhere they want. Do its advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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301 words
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