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The natural resources such as oil, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems?

The natural resources such as oil, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems? P62X
The time has come for international soul-searching about the environment. The industrial The time has come for international soul-searching about the environment. The industrial revolution has changed forever the relation between humanity and nature. In this essay I intend to explore the problems caused by the increased consumption of oil, forests and fresh water, and suggest some solutions. Talking about oil first, it is well known that oil is non-renewable and so will finish very soon. Pollution is another problem that is caused by the use of oil. Oil is used in vehicles, industries and homes. Simple measures can be taken to lessen its use. At individual level we can use more public transport; we can make lifestyle changes and use fewer luxuries. At government level, people can be educated. More effort can be done to research alternative sources of energy Secondly, water, especially fresh water, is another big area of concern. There can be no life without water. Water is the most precious commodity today. Fresh water resources are depleting fast. At individual level we should use water conservatively and recycle water wherever possible. At government level desalination plants can be set. Strict laws can be enforced for industries against pollution of fresh water by effluents. Finally, because of deforestation, many animals and plants, which provide us food, medicine and other valuable products, are facing extinction. We have less bio-diversity also. Moreover, when trees are cut, the soil is exposed to heavy rain and so is washed away. The soil also becomes infertile. Also, trees absorb carbon-dioxide, which causes global warming. If there are no trees, there will be increase of greenhouse gases and this would not be good for our environment. As a solution, afforestation should be promoted as a solution. If each one of us plants a tree and nurtures it for few months, then the day is not far when we shall have greenery all over. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that oil, forests and fresh water are very necessary if we have to survive. So we should use them judiciously, else our future is bleak
The time has
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for international soul-searching about the environment. The industrial The time has
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for international soul-searching about the environment.
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The
industrial revolution has
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forever the relation between humanity and nature. In this essay I intend to explore the problems caused by the increased consumption of
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oil
, forests and
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fresh
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water
, and suggest
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some
solutions.

Talking about
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oil
first
, it is well known that
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is non-renewable and
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so
will finish
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very
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soon
. Pollution is another problem that
is caused
by the
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of
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oil
.
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Oil
is
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used
in vehicles, industries and homes. Simple measures can
be taken
to lessen its
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use
. At individual
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level
we can
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more public transport; we can
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lifestyle
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changes
and
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fewer luxuries. At
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government
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level
,
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people
can
be educated
. More effort can
be done
to research alternative sources of
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energy


Secondly
,
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,
especially
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fresh
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, is another
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area of concern. There can be no life without
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water
.
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Water
is the most precious commodity
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today
.
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Fresh
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resources are depleting
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fast
. At individual
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level
we should
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use
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water
conservatively
and recycle
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water
wherever possible. At
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government
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level
desalination plants can
be set
. Strict laws can
be enforced
for industries against pollution of
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fresh
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water
by effluents.

Finally
,
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of deforestation,
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animals and plants, which provide us food, medicine and other valuable products, are facing extinction. We have less bio-diversity
also
.
Moreover
, when
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trees
are
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cut
, the soil
is exposed
to heavy rain and
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is washed
away. The soil
also
becomes infertile.
Also
,
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trees
absorb carbon-dioxide, which causes global warming. If there are no
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trees
, there will be increase of greenhouse gases and this would not be
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good
for our environment. As a solution, afforestation should
be promoted
as a solution. If each one of us plants a
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tree
and nurtures it for few months, then the day is not far when we shall have greenery all over.

In conclusion
, I would like to reiterate that
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oil
, forests and
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fresh
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water
are
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very
necessary if we
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have to
survive.
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So
we should
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use
them
judiciously
, else our future is
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bleak
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IELTS essay The natural resources such as oil, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems?

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  American English
5 paragraphs
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