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The movements of people from the villages to the cities for work has caused a lots of problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

The movements of people from the villages to the cities for work has caused a lots of problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to solve these problems? oR8Xg
While thousands of people in many big cities have to commute to get to work creating great pressure on road system, the development of public transport may alleviate this issue. It should be noted, extremely expensive real estate in downtown makes people to accommodate in suburban areas, and vast amount of those persons use a personal vehicle to go to work every day. Such an enormous flow of cars to downtown during rush hours stuffs roads and creates numerous of traffic jams. Therefore, it is very time-consuming to drive to work and back home. To exemplify, according to statistics, New Yorkers spend on average 3 hours a day to commute. As a result, lifestyle is becoming stressful and rough. As for a possible solution, local authorities may use the experience of a number of European towns, where the development of public railway transport from rural areas to the centre of cities have been prioritized. Instead of buying automobiles, commuters go to work by comfortable trams, which move apart from other vehicles, and do not stay in jams. For example, the population of Amsterdam needs only about a hour for their daily journey from home to work and back. Although trams may solve a transport problem, it demands a lot of time to implement. In conclusion, although daily migration of population from suburbs to downtown at morning and back at evenings is a huge problem for all but every big city, numerous cities have created the widespread net of railway public transport that is able to handle with such a huge passenger flow.
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commute to
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get
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creating great pressure on road system, the development of public
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transport
may alleviate this issue.

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be noted
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extremely
expensive real estate in downtown
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makes
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people
to accommodate in suburban areas, and vast amount of those persons
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use
a personal vehicle to go to
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work
every day. Such an enormous flow of cars to downtown during rush hours stuffs roads and creates numerous of traffic jams.
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, it is
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very
time-consuming to drive to
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work
and back home. To exemplify, according to statistics, New Yorkers spend on average 3 hours a day to commute.
As a result
, lifestyle is becoming stressful and rough.

As for a possible solution, local authorities may
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use
the experience of a number of European towns, where the development of public railway
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transport
from rural areas to the
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centre
of
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cities
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have
been prioritized
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Instead
of buying automobiles, commuters go to
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work
by comfortable trams, which
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move
apart from other vehicles, and do not stay in jams.
For example
, the population of Amsterdam needs
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about
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hour for their daily journey from home to
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work
and back. Although trams may solve a
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transport
problem, it demands
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a lot of
time to implement.

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, although daily migration of population from suburbs to downtown at morning and back at evenings is a huge problem for all
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but
every
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big
city, numerous
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cities
have created the widespread net of railway public
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transport
that is
able to handle with such a huge passenger flow.
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IELTS essay The movements of people from the villages to the cities for work has caused a lots of problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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4 paragraphs
262 words
6.0
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