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The most beautiful girl in town

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Once upon a time I spend dreaming days thinking in this girl who was in the same class as me. Her name was Deborah but all of my friends used to call her "Vampire" because she had white toned skin and, when we were in second grade she bite another boy from a upper class because he was picking up her. She stood right there by herself and bit right away the arm of the other kid. I thought he would start to bleed after seeing how feral Debs went out. Since that day I could not think in another matter that was no her. I was thrilled by her strength and determination. It's really funny to think about it now, but I guess she was my first crush.

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 as me. Her name was Deborah This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
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used
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VampireUse a smart closing quote here: "”".”
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because
 she had white toned skin and, when we were in second grade she The pronoun 'she' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "bites", "bit".bitesbit
bite
 another boy from Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
a
 upper This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
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because
 he was picking up her. She stood right there by herself and It seems that an article is missing.a bit
bit
 right away the arm of the other kid. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 he would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 to bleed after seeing how feral Debs went out. “Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
 that day I could not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 in another matter that was A determiner cannot combine with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply "her ." or "no ."?her .no .
no her.
 I was thrilled
 by her strength and determination. It's really
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funny
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 about it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I guess she was my first
 crush. 