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The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. 62bj
Nowadays, it is argued that TV, media, and magazines are fixated on the lives of well-known people such as actors and singers. Several people believe that they should devote more time to report ordinary peoples' lives instead. In my opinion, I agree that the media should focus more on documenting the lives of regular people instead of celebrities, due to their fascinating lives and talents. I believe that ordinary people should be noticed more than famous people, because they provide more authentic and realistic role models. Furthermore, they are working hard to benefit their society, and be a role model for many people. Moreover, ordinary people continue to do a lot of charity and volunteer work, and they can influence various age groups. Unfortunately, no one knows them so that these ordinary people could become a good example to others. For example, my neighbor has many achievements in serving people and volunteering, he participates with charities, and then he travels to poor countries to distribute clothes, gifts and necessary supplies such as water and food. I always sit with him and enjoy talking, consequently he is a good example for me and changed both my life and my thinking for the better with his advice. However, I am sure that if he is known among people, he will start to change their minds and make them deal with life in a positive way and love benevolence. Regarding normal people with extraordinary talents, , the media must pay more attention to these humble personalities and their accomplishments so that many people are also motivated by them. People who are far from the spotlight and fame usually have great skills. For instance, in their leisure time, ordinary people prefer to spend their time developing the skill of reading, playing, singing, writing scientific reports, and many more amazing things. Unlike celebrities, they do not have the time to develop their skills and spend time with themselves due to their busy lives. Therefore, we must learn and know the secrets of gifted ordinary people and how they can control time and be efficient in what they do. Consequently, they will influence the lives of the people in a wonderful way which will lead to a positive society with many creative people. In conclusion, I think it is a great idea to show how ordinary people live because they have wonderful lives and skills. Undoubtedly, most of them will change our lives for the better through their achievements that will motivate us.
Nowadays, it
is argued
that TV, media, and magazines
are fixated
on the
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lives
of well-known
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people
such as actors and singers. Several
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people
believe that they should devote more
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time
to report
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ordinary
peoples'
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lives
instead
. In my opinion, I
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agree
that the media should focus more on documenting the
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lives
of regular
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people
instead
of celebrities, due to their fascinating
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lives
and talents.

I believe that
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ordinary
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people
should
be noticed
more than
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famous
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people
,
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because
they provide more authentic and realistic role models.
Furthermore
, they are working
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hard
to benefit their society, and be a role model for
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many
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people
.
Moreover
,
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ordinary
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people
continue to do
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a lot of
charity and volunteer work, and they can influence various age groups. Unfortunately, no one knows them
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so
that these
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ordinary
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people
could become a
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good
example to others.
For example
, my neighbor has
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many
achievements in serving
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people
and volunteering, he participates with charities, and then he travels to poor countries to distribute clothes, gifts and necessary supplies such as water and food. I always sit with him and enjoy talking,
consequently
he is a
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good
example for me and
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changed
both my life and my thinking for the better with his advice.
However
, I am sure that if he
is known
among
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people
, he will
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start
to
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change
their minds and
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make
them deal with life in a
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positive
way and
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love
benevolence.

Regarding normal
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people
with extraordinary talents,
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,
the media
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must
pay more attention to these humble personalities and their accomplishments
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so
that
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many
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people
are
also
motivated by them.
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People
who are far from the spotlight and fame
usually
have great
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skills
.
For instance
, in their leisure
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time
,
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ordinary
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people
prefer to spend their
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time
developing the
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skill
of reading, playing, singing, writing scientific reports, and
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many
more amazing things. Unlike celebrities, they do not have the
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time
to develop their
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skills
and spend
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time
with themselves due to their busy
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lives
.
Therefore
, we
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must
learn and know the secrets of gifted
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ordinary
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people
and how they can control
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time
and be efficient in what they do.
Consequently
, they will influence the
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lives
of the
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people
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in a wonderful way
which will lead to a
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positive
society with
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many
creative
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people
.

In conclusion
, I
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think
it is a great
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idea
to
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show
how
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ordinary
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people
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live
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because
they have wonderful
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lives
and
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skills
.
Undoubtedly
, most of them will
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change
our
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lives
for the better through their achievements that will motivate us.
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IELTS essay The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
417 words
6.0
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