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The maps illustrate how a university's campus changed between 2000 and 2015.

The maps illustrate how a university's campus changed between 2000 and 2015. 0w1yq
Overall, the university underwent a number of significant changes, the most important of which are the expansion of classrooms and the disappearance of all of the trees in the school. The main building in the northwest of the map had only three seminar rooms in 2000, with seminar room 1 and 2 on the left and seminar room 3 on the right, and it was expanded northwards with two more classrooms. The corridor separating those seminar rooms was also extended to cater for the expansion of the building. Another change is that the library opposite seminar room 1 through the corridor was removed to allow the office next to it to expand. The main entrance in the middle of the map allowing access to the main building from the main road remained, while a car park was constructed on the right of the entrance. The trees in the northeast were cleared to facilitate the construction of a library and an IT center. A corridor was built between these two rooms.
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is that the library opposite
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1 through the corridor
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entrance in the middle of the map allowing access to the
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main
building from the
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road remained, while a car park
was constructed
on the right of the entrance. The trees in the northeast
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to facilitate the construction of a library and an IT center. A corridor
was built
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IELTS essay The maps illustrate how a university's campus changed between 2000 and 2015.

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