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The main reason to go to shopping mall is only for entertainment

The main reason to go to shopping mall is only for entertainment nNyxe
Numerous individuals use to go to shopping malls a variety of something they need. they said that trade centres do not have to more adequate service, in spite of this, they believe that supermarkets would be enterinment for everyone. However, in front of my view, that malls should have to affordable and more facility for peoples. On the one hand, Verious of markets have not been bargainning with costumers, on top of this, bulky of essential things are being sold on one price by like this markets, Additionly, Most of the bargain centers affordable also well-known its' lowest price. On the other hand, a number of humans have been gone to shoppong senters due to display a convinient place as well these places are being saw by amount of humans. Nowadays a number of citys have a bargainning places to see numerous comfortable furniture and another things, but I mean, People ought to go to that places to buy something not have to go there only to show. To sum up with these days several peoples go to malls only to around and see it. I believe that in the future all of humans would go to malls to buy something.
Numerous individuals
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use to
go to shopping
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malls
a variety of something they need.
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they
said that trade
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centres
do not
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have to
more adequate service,
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in spite of
this, they believe that supermarkets would be
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enterinment
for everyone.
However
, in front of my view, that
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malls
should
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have to
affordable and more facility for peoples.

On the one hand,
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Verious
of markets have not been
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bargainning
with costumers, on top of this, bulky of essential things are
being sold
on one price by like this markets,
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Additionly
, Most of the bargain centers affordable
also
well-known
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its'
lowest price.

On the other hand
, a number of humans have
been gone
to
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shoppong
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senters
due to display a
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convinient
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place
as well
these
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places
are being
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saw
by amount of humans. Nowadays a number of
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citys have
a
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bargainning
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places
to
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see
numerous comfortable furniture and another things,
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but
I mean,
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People
ought to go to that
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places
to
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buy
something not
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have to
go there
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only
to
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show
.

To sum up with these days several peoples go to
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malls
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only
to around and
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see
it. I believe that in the future
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all of humans
would go to
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malls
to
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buy
something.
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IELTS essay The main reason to go to shopping mall is only for entertainment

Essay
  American English
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201 words
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