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The line is not not for the local government which is interrupted to be exactly

The line is not not for the local government which is interrupted to be exactly m3G0r
Anybody will not purchase print magazines or books due to the fact that they can read them online easily without payment not too distant future. This essay will argue that I partially agree with the statement. On the one hand, the majority of elderly people enjoy reading book. It is because they do not frequently know how to use mobile phone, especially, social media. Namely, they have never used these kinds of appliance in their all life. Secondly, if everybody uses an electronica device in order to read the PDF version, it can cause some diseases which are associated with sight. For example, my friend is who used to read books and newspapers online, after a long time, he needed some treatment for his vision. Thus, this case can deal with other problems in our daily life. On the other hand, there are the foremost and first advantages that they can save our money which is prevented to spend more money only for reading. Namely, they help our financial side which is essential. Secondly, the technology and internet are developing nowadays. And also, we can find any book which we want to read in our leisure time. Even if the book is not sold at the market or is extremely costly, you can get free this book via internet. What's more, this is beneficial for not only our budget but also our time management which we can download them everywhere, instead of going bookshop. In conclusion, everybody can read everything online without paying apart from the case that elderly people would rather choose still printed version in the future. I support every side because those situations can be borh convenient in terms of time and hazardous for our health
Anybody will not
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purchase
print magazines or
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books
due to the fact that they can
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read
them online
easily
without payment not too distant future. This essay will argue that I
partially
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agree
with the statement.

On the one hand, the majority of elderly
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people
enjoy reading
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book
. It is
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because
they do not
frequently
know how to
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use
mobile phone,
especially
, social media.
Namely
, they have never
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used
these kinds of appliance in their all life.
Secondly
, if everybody
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uses
an electronica device in order to
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read
the PDF version, it can cause
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some
diseases which
are associated
with sight.
For example
, my friend is who
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used
to
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read
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books
and newspapers online, after a long
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time
, he needed
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some
treatment for his vision.
Thus
, this case can deal with other problems in our daily life.

On the other hand
, there are the foremost and
first
advantages that they can save our money which is
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prevented
to spend more money
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only
for reading.
Namely
, they
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help
our financial side which is essential.
Secondly
, the technology and internet are developing nowadays. And
also
, we can find any
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book
which we want to
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read
in our leisure
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time
. Even if the
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book
is not sold at the market or is
extremely
costly, you can
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get
free this
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book
via internet. What's more, this is beneficial for not
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only
our budget
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but
also
our
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time
management which we can download them everywhere,
instead
of going bookshop.

In conclusion
, everybody can
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read
everything online without paying apart from the case that elderly
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people
would
rather
choose
still
printed version in the future. I support every side
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because
those situations can be
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borh
convenient in terms of
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time
and hazardous for our
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health

IELTS essay The line is not not for the local government which is interrupted to be exactly

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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