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The line graph displays information about the number of type of enquiries are made by tourist to the Tourist Information Office in one city for six months period in 2011.

The line graph displays information about the number of type of enquiries are made by tourist to the Tourist Information Office in one city for six months period in 2011. b2ABY
The line graph displays information about the number of type of enquiries are made by tourist to the Tourist Information Office in one city for six months period in 2011. Generally, the most of visitor more likely to sent their enquiries directly in person. On the other side, the trend of visitor who sent a letter or an email just a few people. Following this data, in January, tourist who sent an enquiry directly in person to the Tourist Information officer was less than 500 in the last position. However, month by month the trend showed significantly growth by 800 in March and continued to drastically rocketed by nearly 2000 at the end of period. On the other side, tourist who made an enquiry by telephone have a similar trend with in person enquiries. In January, it accounted by 900 and slightly dropped by 800 in February and continued to rose by 100 in March. The trend constantly increased. On the contrary, request made by a letter or an email where in January in the second position by nearly 800 after telephone, there was an altered trend, that showed decreased in March by approximately 700 and continued to fell by nearly 400 in May and remained steady at the end of period.
The line graph displays information about the number of type of
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enquiries
are made
by
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tourist
to the
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Tourist
Information Office in one city for six months period in 2011.

Generally
, the
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most of visitor
more likely to
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sent
their
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enquiries
directly
in person. On the other side, the
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trend
of visitor who
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sent
a letter or an email
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just
a few
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people
.

Following this data, in January,
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tourist
who
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sent
an
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enquiry
directly
in person to the
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Tourist
Information officer was less than 500 in the last position.
However
, month by month the
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trend
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showed
significantly
growth by 800 in March and continued to
drastically
rocketed by
nearly
2000 at the
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end
of period.

On the other side,
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tourist
who made an
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enquiry
by telephone have a similar
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trend
with in person
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enquiries
. In January, it accounted by 900 and
slightly
dropped by 800 in February and continued to rose by 100 in March. The
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trend
constantly
increased.

On the contrary
, request made by a letter or an email where in January in the second position by
nearly
800 after telephone, there was an altered
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trend
, that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
decreased in March by approximately 700 and continued to fell by
nearly
400 in May and remained steady at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of period.
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IELTS essay The line graph displays information about the number of type of enquiries are made by tourist to the Tourist Information Office in one city for six months period in 2011.

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