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The issue of public Health has come to the forefront of the government in recent years

The issue of public Health has come to the forefront of the government in recent years 0njQ9
The issue of public Health has come to the forefront of the government in recent years. Some say that the amount of sports equipments have meager sense on public health; however, I agree with those who are in opposition from this. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs as well as proffer justification for own viewpoint. Regarding those who hold that the increasing public sport facilities has positive effects on health, there are many reasons. On supportive claim is that people can utilize them everywhere and free of charge, that leads to give more opportunities for larger part of society to practice sports. It is a no-brainer that has huge effect on the health. A case in point would be the Netherlands healthcare system in poblic sport facilities, with ubiquity of these opportunities, it has one of the highest places in the world between other countries. Fitness equipments in the parks, bike paths and so on. Nevertheless, returning to those who do not agree with the positive impact of the spreading more poblic sport facilities on the quality of living in society, there are some reasons. One obvious one is that this policy will not be able to be efficient on its own. More specifically, there are other criteria’s which the government should use to reach that objective. For instance, poblic awareness, cultural motivations and media are required as other measures. In sum, I maintain that this kind of equipments will continue to thrive in society, because some people know its substantial impact on health. In the future, I sincerely wish more individuals would realize the positive significance of poblic sport facilities, and make them a part of their daily activities.
The issue of public
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in recent years.
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say that the amount of
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sports
equipments have meager sense on public
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health
;
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agree
with those who are in opposition from this. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs
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proffer justification for
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own
viewpoint.

Regarding those who hold that the increasing public
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sport
facilities has
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positive
effects on
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health
, there are
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many
reasons. On supportive claim is that
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people
can utilize them everywhere and free of charge, that leads to give more opportunities for larger part of society to practice
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sports
. It is a no-brainer that has huge effect on the
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health
. A case in point would be the Netherlands healthcare system in
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poblic
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sport
facilities, with ubiquity of these opportunities, it has one of the highest places in the world between other countries. Fitness equipments in the parks, bike paths and
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so
on.

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, returning to those who do not
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agree
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positive
impact of the spreading more
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poblic
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sport
facilities on the quality of living in society, there are
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some
reasons. One obvious one is that this policy will not be able to be efficient on its
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own
. More
specifically
, there are other criteria’s which the
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government
should
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use
to reach that objective.
For instance
,
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poblic
awareness, cultural motivations and media
are required
as other measures.

In sum, I maintain that this kind of equipments will continue to thrive in society,
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because
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some
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people
know its substantial impact on
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health
. In the future, I
sincerely
wish more individuals would realize the
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positive
significance of
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poblic
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sport
facilities, and
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make
them a part of their daily activities.
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IELTS essay The issue of public Health has come to the forefront of the government in recent years

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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