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The internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. how far do you agree with this prediction? v.5

The internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. how far do you agree with this prediction? v. 5
TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN UPGRADING ALL THE SYSTEM AROUNT THE WORLD. HENCE, MANY PEOPLE PREDICT THAT THERE WILL NO MORE ANCIENT TYPE OF SCHOOL IN THE FORTHCOMING. THIS ESSAY WILL TOTALLY CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE PREDICTION BECAUSE OF THE NUMERIOUS ADVANTAGES OF THE CYBERSPACE IN COMAPRISON TO DISADVANTAGE. FIRSTLY, THE FOLLOWIG ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BEHIND THE THE UPCOMING TREND. ON THE ONE HAND, PHYSICAL BOOKS PROVIDE THE EASY READING AS AND LESS HEALTH DAMAGE SUCH EYE STRAIN AND BACK PROBLEMS DUE TO THE FACT THAT IT PROVIDES THE LIFE TIME INVESTMENT. PERSON CAN READ THAT WHENEVER THEY WANT WITHOUT AFFECTING THE FITNESS. HOWEEVR, THIS FORM OF BOOKS HAVE SOME PROBLEM OF BUYING DUE TO THE HIGH COST. FOR EXAMPLE, 70% OF THE INDIANS SCHOOLS HAVE THE REGULATION THAT EVERY STUDENT SHOUOLC HAVE THE PHYSICAL COURSE BOOKS. THUS, GOVERNEMNT IS PROVIDING THAT FOR THE FREE OF COST TO THE PUPILS. ON THE OTHER HAND, INTERNET JUST REQUIRES A WEB CONNECTION BY MEANS THEY GET THE INFORMATION. MOREOVER, ONCE THE MATEROALS DOWLOADED IN THE COMPUTER, IT CAN STAY THERE FOREVER AND ONE CAN READ AT HIS CONVENIENCE. FOR INSTANCE, 80% OF THE PEOPLE ARE USING E-BOOKS AS ONE CAN CARRY IT WITHOUT ANY BURDEN AS IT CAN BE STIRED IN ANY STORAGABLE DEVICES SUCH AS LAPTOP OR MOBILE. IN CONCLUSION, AFTER SEEING THE UPSURGE IN THE INOVATION IN THEGADGETS I CAN ASSUME THAT THE FUTURE WILLBE THE DIGITAL RATHER THAN MENUAL. NONETHELESS, BOTH THE FORM OGF BOOKS INDEED PROVIDE THE KNOWLEDGE AS PER THE INDIVIDUALS REQUIREMET.
TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN UPGRADING ALL THE SYSTEM
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AROUNT
THE WORLD.
HENCE
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
MANY
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
PEOPLE
PREDICT THAT THERE WILL NO MORE ANCIENT TYPE OF SCHOOL IN THE FORTHCOMING. THIS ESSAY WILL
TOTALLY
CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE PREDICTION
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
BECAUSE
OF THE
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NUMERIOUS
ADVANTAGES OF THE CYBERSPACE IN
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COMAPRISON
TO DISADVANTAGE.
FIRSTLY
, THE
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FOLLOWIG
ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BEHIND
Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "THE" or "THE" is left.
THE THE
UPCOMING TREND.

ON THE ONE HAND, PHYSICAL
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BOOKS
PROVIDE THE EASY READING AS AND LESS HEALTH DAMAGE SUCH EYE STRAIN AND BACK PROBLEMS DUE TO THE FACT THAT IT PROVIDES THE
Did you mean "lifetime"?
LIFE TIME
INVESTMENT. PERSON CAN READ THAT WHENEVER THEY WANT WITHOUT AFFECTING THE FITNESS.
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HOWEEVR
, THIS FORM OF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
BOOKS
HAVE
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
SOME
PROBLEM OF BUYING DUE TO THE HIGH COST.
FOR EXAMPLE
, 70% OF THE INDIANS SCHOOLS HAVE THE REGULATION THAT EVERY STUDENT
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SHOUOLC
HAVE THE PHYSICAL COURSE
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BOOKS
.
THUS
,
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GOVERNEMNT
IS PROVIDING THAT FOR THE FREE OF COST TO THE PUPILS.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, INTERNET
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
JUST
REQUIRES A WEB CONNECTION BY MEANS THEY
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
GET
THE INFORMATION.
MOREOVER
, ONCE THE
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MATEROALS
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DOWLOADED
The usual collocation for technology is "on," not "in." It is better to say this: "on the COMPUTER".
IN THE COMPUTER
, IT CAN STAY THERE FOREVER AND ONE CAN READ AT HIS CONVENIENCE.
FOR INSTANCE
, 80% OF THE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
PEOPLE
ARE USING E-BOOKS AS ONE CAN CARRY IT WITHOUT ANY BURDEN AS IT CAN BE
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STIRED
IN ANY
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STORAGABLE
DEVICES SUCH AS LAPTOP OR MOBILE.

IN CONCLUSION
, AFTER SEEING THE UPSURGE IN THE
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INOVATION
IN
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THEGADGETS
I CAN ASSUME THAT THE FUTURE
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WILLBE
THE DIGITAL
RATHER
THAN
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MENUAL
. NONETHELESS, BOTH THE FORM OGF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
BOOKS
INDEED
PROVIDE THE KNOWLEDGE AS PER THE INDIVIDUALS
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REQUIREMET
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. how far do you agree with this prediction? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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