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‘The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. ’ How far do you agree with this prediction? v.4

‘The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. ’ How far do you agree with this prediction? v. 4
Teaching method and curriculum management are essential in delivering an effective lesson in pupils, especially in today huge range of resources available world. I completely agree with the idea that there will always be a great role of convention program books, despite the many benefits of the online network. First of all, it is a significant fact that the majority of the high school's long-term curriculum is entirely associated with content of traditional course books which is consistently revised by formal association referred to government education policy in order to hold modern approaches for efficient learning. This means that the course books are proven to crucial in the student's further and higher education in their career progression. Another vital point would be related to some drawbacks in training websites, if students cannot be afforded to attain adequate research experience. In other words, threats to cheat is broadening in social network due to some less-responsible mind and free flow of fake data. In these doubtful information, students face a new challenge to marsh and distinguish news found in internet, meaning that making their primary objectives more complex to be efficient. In addition, it is said that internet-based assignments are more advanced activity dedicated to at least postgraduate levels. Admittedly, i agree with those who extremely argue that conventional rote-learning stereotype is continually losing its initial substance. Despite this, it seems that for many well-known schools, this drawback can be decided as renewed viable options. To summerize, it is a reasonable for educational institutions to enhance as urgently as their course books to maintain innovation curriculum regardless seeing its some disadvantages contributed by internet.
Teaching method and curriculum management are essential in delivering an effective lesson in pupils,
especially
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
huge range of resources available world. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that there will always be a great role of convention program
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, despite the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
benefits of the online network.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it is a significant fact that the majority of the high school's long-term curriculum is
entirely
associated with content of traditional course
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
which is
consistently
revised by formal association referred to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
education policy in order to hold modern approaches for efficient learning. This means that the course
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
are proven
to crucial in the student's
further
and higher education in their career progression. Another vital point would
be related
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
drawbacks in training websites, if students cannot
be afforded
to attain adequate research experience.
In other words
, threats to cheat is broadening in social network due to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
less-responsible mind and free flow of fake data. In these doubtful information, students face a new challenge to marsh and distinguish news found in internet, meaning that making their primary objectives more complex to be efficient.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
addition, it
is said
that internet-based assignments are more advanced activity dedicated to at least postgraduate levels.

Admittedly
,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with those who
extremely
argue that conventional rote-learning stereotype is
continually
losing its initial substance. Despite this, it seems that for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
well-known schools, this drawback can
be decided
as renewed viable options.

To
Possible spelling mistake found.
summerize
, it is a reasonable for educational institutions to enhance as
urgently
as their course
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
to maintain innovation curriculum regardless seeing
Did you mean "it's" (="it is") instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
its
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
disadvantages contributed by internet.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay ‘The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. ’ How far do you agree with this prediction? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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