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The Internet is brings many benefits. Agree or disagree

The Internet is brings many benefits. Agree or disagree mLgPd
The Internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. Firstly, people can find friends by looking up their names in the search of Facebook or Instagram. People can call and see parents, friends through applications such as Viber and Message, etc. On the other hand, it also isolates us and incourage people not to socialise. Firstly, people can play online game, entertainment whole day by Facebook, etc. Secondly, when people shopping, watching movie at home. It makes people feel boring, less active, less communicative with everyone.
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can find friends by looking up their names in the search of Facebook or Instagram.
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can call and
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parents, friends through applications such as
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incourage
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can play online game, entertainment whole day by Facebook, etc.
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shopping, watching movie at home. It
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IELTS essay The Internet is brings many benefits. Agree or disagree

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