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The Internet has provided great benefits, but at the same time it has also created new dangers and inequalities. Is it possible to control some of these problems

The Internet has provided great benefits, but at the same time it has also created new dangers and inequalities. Is it possible to control some of these problems WEDJk
No-one can deny that the Internet ltas reuolutionised much of society. Indiuiduals benefitfrorn access to almost endless amounts of information on theWorldWide Veb, as tlell as being able to communicate easily and cheaply utith fiends and strangers. For the business world the impact ltas been euen rl'tore dramatic. Vast sums of monry are constantly being instantly transferred around the utorld by electronic meAns. Banhs and otlter businesses now totally depend on tlte Internet. There are, houteuer, significant dangers in this deueloprnent. The frst problem that rnost PeoPle think of is tlte danger of hachers inuading tlte system and either obtaining secret inforrnation or introducing uiruses tltat cause irnmense damage. It is unlikely that this problem can euer be completely solued. As soon as tlte technology is deueloped to ouercoTne one hacher, anotber one produces some nela method. Apart fom this technical problem, houteuer, there is a rnuclt deeper one, and that is the inequality benreen indiuidualr and societies, uthich tlte Internet is mahing laorse. The gap behreen the rich and the poor is growing rapidly in the world, and access to the Internet is a signifcant part of the problem. Deueloping countries wltere scltools cAnnot offird computers, and small businesses which do not ltaue Internet Accest Are being lefi further and further behind. Some people belieue that if computers dre tuidely disnibuted in poor societies that this would be an important to reduce the inequalities. Others feel that the problem is much deeper, and needs to be deab u. , ith by bodies suclt as the World Tiade Organisation. The anstaer is probably that all possible methods should be used to breah down the inequalities, including Access to tlte Internet, to ensure that the world does not become more arud more unstable.
No-one can deny that the Internet
ltas
reuolutionised
much of society.
Indiuiduals


benefitfrorn
access to almost endless amounts of information on
theWorldWide


Veb
, as
tlell
as being able to communicate
easily
and
cheaply
utith
fiends and

strangers. For the business world the impact
ltas
been
euen
rl
'tore dramatic. Vast sums

of
monry
are
constantly
being
instantly
transferred around the
utorld
by electronic

meAns
.
Banhs
and
otlter
businesses
now
totally
depend on
tlte
Internet.

There are,
houteuer
, significant
dangers
in this
deueloprnent
. The
frst
problem
that

rnost
PeoPle
think
of is
tlte
danger
of
hachers
inuading
tlte
system and either

obtaining secret
inforrnation
or introducing
uiruses
tltat
cause
irnmense
damage. It is

unlikely that this
problem
can
euer
be completely
solued
. As
soon
as
tlte
technology is

deueloped
to
ouercoTne
one
hacher
,
anotber
one produces
some
nela
method.

Apart
fom
this technical
problem
,
houteuer
, there is a
rnuclt
deeper one, and
that is


the inequality
benreen
indiuidualr
and societies,
uthich
tlte
Internet is
mahing
laorse
.

The gap
behreen
the rich and the poor is growing
rapidly
in the world, and access to

the Internet is a
signifcant
part of the
problem
.
Deueloping
countries
wltere
scltools


cAnnot
offird
computers, and
small
businesses which do not
ltaue
Internet
Accest
Are

being
lefi
further
and
further
behind.

Some
people
belieue
that if computers
dre
tuidely
disnibuted
in poor societies that

this would be an
important
to
reduce
the inequalities. Others feel that the

problem is much deeper, and needs to be
deab
u.
,
ith
by bodies
suclt
as the World

Tiade
Organisation
.

The
anstaer
is
probably
that all possible methods should be
used
to
breah
down the

inequalities, including Access to
tlte
Internet, to ensure that the world does not

become more
arud
more unstable.
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IELTS essay The Internet has provided great benefits, but at the same time it has also created new dangers and inequalities. Is it possible to control some of these problems

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  American English
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292 words
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