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. Some people think that music has its pros and cons. What are the adventages and disadventages of music.

. Some people think that music has its pros and cons. What are the adventages and disadventages of music. pXDx9
Nowadays, some people believe, there are different useful and harmful aspects of the listen to music. That is why, every people should be listen to music with day by day. This is mainly because, music cause different diseases. Firstly, every people enjoy with music. If they have work to do, they end up listening to music. Secondly, different music influence to every people mood. For example, jazz music is lifts the mood. But quiet music download the mood. That is human is upset and wants to cry. On the other hand, if we hear music on a headset, this process cause various diseases. For instance, deafness, talking loudly to people and so on. In conclusion, there are pros and cons aspects of the listen to music. That is why every person should be hear music with time to time.
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IELTS essay . Some people think that music has its pros and cons. What are the adventages and disadventages of music.

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