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The internet has made knowledge immediately available through computers and smartphones all over the world. Much of the information is free. Discuss the both advantages and drawbacks of this trend. v.1

The internet has made knowledge immediately available through computers and smartphones all over the world. Much of the information is free. Discuss the both advantages and drawbacks of this trend. v. 1
In this contemporary era, The Internet is revolutionising every aspect of life. Even more, most of the people got success with the help of this technology by gaining their knowledge from it. Like the two sides of a coin, it has both benefits and drawbacks which will elucidate in this essay. To embark upon, it has a plethora of advantages. Nowadays, everyone has the internet on their mobile, so they can easily access all types of knowledge from Google. For example, a person who wants to go into a new area and he does not know the directions, but he can use the Google map application and search the directions easily. Furthermore, The Internet is a good facility for everyone because these days most of the people prefer to use social media rather than the watching Televisions. Therefore, mostly all news is spreading through social websites due to an Internet. For instance, Recently the Government of the Punjab has given red alert to all districts about incoming floods because of heavy rain. So, these types of news spread like a fire on the internet and everyone gets this knowledge easily. On the other side of an argument, it can be irrefutable it has few negative factors as well. Like, we can search anything on the Internet. Thus, it has bad aspect for children. For example, The children can easily access some non-adults websites just by signing up the Gmail. Moreover, it has another thing is that it helps for crimes as well. For instance, many criminals are using internet calling system for doing crimes and police cannot trace their calls. Thus, criminals got success to complete their targets. To recapitulate, it can be concluded that, it is very wide technology all over the world. It has more positive factors than its drawbacks, but if we used it for good purposes not for crimes.
In this contemporary era, The Internet is
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revolutionising
every aspect of life. Even more, most of the
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
success with the
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help
of this technology by gaining their knowledge from it. Like the two sides of a coin, it has both benefits and drawbacks which will elucidate in this essay.

To embark upon, it has a plethora of advantages. Nowadays, everyone has the internet on their mobile,
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so
they can
easily
access all types of knowledge from Google.
For example
, a person who wants to go into a new
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area and
he does not know the directions,
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but
he can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the Google map application and search the directions
easily
.
Furthermore
, The Internet is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
facility for everyone
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because
these days most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
social media
rather
than the watching Televisions.
Therefore
,
mostly
all news is spreading through social websites due to an Internet.
For instance
, Recently the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
of the Punjab has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
red alert to all districts about incoming floods
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of heavy rain.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, these types of news spread like a fire on the internet and everyone
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gets
this knowledge
easily
.

On the other side of an argument, it can be irrefutable it has few
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
factors
as well
. Like, we can search anything on the Internet.
Thus
, it has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
aspect for children.
For example
, The children can
easily
access
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some
non-adults websites
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
by signing up the Gmail.
Moreover
, it has another thing is that it
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helps
for crimes
as well
.
For instance
,
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many
criminals are using internet calling system for doing crimes and police cannot trace their calls.
Thus
, criminals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
success to complete their targets.

To recapitulate, it can
be concluded
that, it is
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very
wide technology all over the world. It has more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
factors than its drawbacks,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
if we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
it for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
purposes not for crimes.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay The internet has made knowledge immediately available through computers and smartphones all over the world. Much of the information is free. Discuss the both advantages and drawbacks of this trend. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
8
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