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The internet has caused people to be isolated form their real lives.Do you agree or disagree?

The internet has caused people to be isolated form their real lives. mRgN
Internet in considered as inevitable tool in the modern society, and it offers reliable means of communication. Many individual opine that internet has allow people to remain alone in their lives. I completely disagree with this statement and believe that internet has made relationship stronger than ever before. To embark on, in past before the development of technology like internet people used to meet with their closest once in a yearly or monthly, and there was only one medium that is letter which made communication possible, but to get reply of that letter it used to take more than one month, and there was no instant communication like today. But in the modern time, internet is considered as one of the most effective way of communication among people. It enabled individual to communicate at any time with the click of just one button. Furthermore, it has made communication possible throughout the world despite geographical barriers. There are various platform such as facebook, whatsapp, viber in modern day which enables people to communicate with friends and family. It has been one of the important tools for eldery people who are physically weak and cannot meet their relatives physically, and can meet with them face to face sitting in the room with just on click. On the other hand, internet has made community relationship stronger than before because people these days make Facebook group in any social cause and collect money to help people who needed help. When individual needed help we can get instant news through social media and many people are there to assist them. At the same time it is easy for people to make friend form different parts of the world, and share their thought and knowledge with them. Moreover, these days many official meeting can be conducted through internet platform. For instance, in the time of coronavirus pandemic people didn’t have chance to attend their office and do important work, but with the help of zoom app it is easy for them to get in touch with their business partner. In conclusion, we cannot deny the fact people are more closer and socialize these days because they are constantly sharing their sorrow and happiness through many platform, and communicate with people around the world. However, there are certain demerits of internet to the society, and cannot be ignored
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to remain alone in their
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. I completely disagree with this statement and believe that internet has made relationship stronger than ever
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the development of technology like internet
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people
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meet
with their closest once in a yearly or monthly, and there was
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only
one medium
that is
letter which made
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communication
possible,
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to
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get
reply of that letter it
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used
to take more than one month, and there was no instant
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communication
like
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today
.
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in the modern
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, internet
is considered
as one of the most effective way of
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communication
among
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people
. It enabled individual to communicate at any
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time
with the click of
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just
one button.
Furthermore
, it has made
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communication
possible throughout the world despite geographical barriers. There are various
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platform
such as
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facebook
,
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whatsapp
,
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viber
in modern day which enables
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people
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important
tools for
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eldery
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people
who are
physically
weak and cannot
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meet
their relatives
physically
, and can
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with them face to face sitting in the room with
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just
on click.

On the other hand
, internet has made community relationship stronger than
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before
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because
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people
these days
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make
Facebook group in any social cause and collect money to
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help
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people
who needed
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help
. When individual needed
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help
we can
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get
instant news through social media and
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many
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people
are there to assist them. At the same
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it is easy for
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people
to
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friend form
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different
parts of the world, and share their
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thought
and knowledge with them.
Moreover
, these days
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official meeting can
be conducted
through internet platform.
For instance
, in the
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of coronavirus pandemic
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people
didn’t have chance to attend their office and do
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important
work,
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but
with the
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help
of zoom app it is easy for them to
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get
in touch with their business partner.

In conclusion
, we cannot deny the fact
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people
are
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more closer
and socialize these days
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because
they are
constantly
sharing their sorrow and happiness through
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many platform
, and communicate with
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people
around the world.
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, there are certain demerits of internet to the society, and cannot be
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IELTS essay The internet has caused people to be isolated form their real lives.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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