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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and your opinion.

Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. eYm7
Organizing high volume events would be challenging for every country because they include high quality of intensions and huge amount of money. There is no doubt that these kinds of events bring number of problems but these events have their positive aspects as well. In this topic we are going to discuss both arguments on international sporting event. To begin with, there are plethora of international games that takes place in different countries such as Cricket, soccer, tennis, hockey and so on. These games can give relaxation and enjoyment to the audience. Moreover, international sporting events can bring economically and socially benefits. For example, IPL cricket event took a place recently in Dubai and it was really a great event for that country because a number of people were watching it online and by television. Furthermore, 2010 Olympics held in London and it bolsters the province economy by 20%. Most of people get their jobs which is the good way to get better in financially. On the other side, these types of events require a huge amount of money and great team to manage it which is possible with number of efforts. Moreover, these events can bring some serious problems regarding health by the way people coming from several countries. For example, Most of people are suffering from COVID 19 and if they go anywhere that could be dangerous for other people. In addition, sometimes these events can be failed and take a significant amount of money. In conclusion, international sporting events have both positive and negative aspects but nowadays, these events are must for our new generation to build their mind in sports. People should neglect the problems from sporting events and focus on what will be beneficiary.
Organizing high volume
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country
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because
they include high quality of
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intensions
and huge amount of money. There is no doubt that these kinds of
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events
bring number of problems
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but
these
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events
have their
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positive
aspects
as well
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international
sporting
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event
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To
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with, there are plethora of
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international
games that takes place in
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different
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countries
such as Cricket, soccer, tennis, hockey and
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on. These games can give relaxation and enjoyment to the audience.
Moreover
,
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international
sporting
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events
can bring
economically
and
socially
benefits.
For example
,
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IPL
cricket
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event
took a place recently in Dubai and it was
really
a great
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for that
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country
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because
a number of
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were watching it online and by television.
Furthermore
, 2010 Olympics held in London and it bolsters the province economy by 20%. Most of
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people
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get
their jobs which is the
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good
way to
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get
better in
financially
.

On the other side, these types of
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events
require a huge amount of money and great team to manage it which is possible with number of efforts.
Moreover
, these
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events
can bring
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some
serious problems regarding health by the way
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people
coming from several
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countries
.
For example
, Most of
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people
are suffering from
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and if they go anywhere that could be
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dangerous
for other
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people
.
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,
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sometimes
these
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events
can
be failed
and take a significant amount of money.

In conclusion
,
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international
sporting
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events
have both
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positive
and
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negative
aspects
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but
nowadays, these
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are
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for our new generation to build their mind in sports.
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should neglect the problems from sporting
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events
and focus on what will be beneficiary.
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IELTS essay Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits.

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