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THE INTERNET BRING ITS CLEAR ADVANTAGES, THE PROBLEMS IN TERMS OF CONTROL AND SECURITY OF INFORMATION OUTWIEGH ITS ADVANTAGES. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE?

THE INTERNET BRING ITS CLEAR ADVANTAGES, THE PROBLEMS IN TERMS OF CONTROL AND SECURITY OF INFORMATION OUTWIEGH ITS ADVANTAGES. 2RVbk
IN RECENT DAYS, THE INCREASES IN TECHNOLOGY SUPPORT PEOPLE TO GET CONNECTED AND ATTAIN WORLD WIDE KNOWLEDGE WITH THE USAGE OF INTERNET HOWEVER, THERE ARE SOME DRWABACK OF INTERNET IS PRIVACY AND RESTRICTION ON WEB. IN MY OPINION, I THINK THAT DISADVANTAGES OVERTOOK ITS BENIFITS AND EXPLAINS THE REASON IN COMING PARAGRAPHS. TO COMMENCE WITH, ONE OF THE ESSENTIAL REASON IS THERE IS BARRIER INTERNET TO SURF. IN OTHER WORDS, IT IS CLEAR THAT WORLD WIDE WEB LIMITLESS DUE TO THE FACT, NEW USER CAN VISIT ANY WEBSITE WHICH, IS NOT SUITABLE FOR THEM. IN ADDITION, THE ADVERTISEMENT ON WEBSITES IS NOT PANELIZED UNDER ANY BOARD WHICH, SOMETIME BREAKS THE LAW OF THAT REGION. FOR EXAMPLE, A YOUNG BOY FROM MALAYSIA LOSES 100 CRORE ON BETTING SITES AS, HE ASSUME IT IS VIDEO GAME. THUS, THERE IS NO BARRIER ON SURFING THE INTERNET WHICH, LEAD TO FINANCIAL AND MENTAL LOSS IN LONG TERM. SECONDLY, THE PIVOTAL DRAWBACK OF INTERNET IS SECURITY ISSUE FOR CIVILIANS. BY THIS I MEAN, THE DATA ON COMPUTER AND SMARTPHONE CAN BE ACCESSIBLE BY THE SOCIAL MEDIA APPS WHICH, INCLINES THE RISK OF PRIVACY AS EVERY PERSONAL DETAIL IS AVAILABLE ON WEB. FOR INSTANCE, THE REGIME OF ENGLAND SECURITY FORCE INFORMATION IS LEAKED ON MEDIA PLATFORMS IN CYBER ATTACKS. AS A RESULT, THE INFORMATION ON WEB IS ALWAYS ON RISK TO AS THERE IS NO SECURANCE. TO SUMMARIZE IT, THE TECHNOLOGY COMES WITH VARIOUS BENEFITS IF, IT IS USED WITH PROPER KNOWLEDGE IN THE CONTRARY, THE CONS OVERTOOK ITS ADVANATAGES AS THERE IS NO RESTRICTION ON WEBSITE FOR SURFING AND THE DATA IS NOT SECURED ON WORLD WIDE WEB WHICH, CREATES THE PROBLEM OF MONETARY AND PERSONAL DATA LOSS.
IN RECENT DAYS, THE INCREASES IN TECHNOLOGY SUPPORT
PEOPLE
TO
GET
CONNECTED AND ATTAIN
WORLD WIDE
KNOWLEDGE WITH THE USAGE OF INTERNET
HOWEVER
, THERE ARE
SOME
DRWABACK
OF INTERNET IS PRIVACY AND RESTRICTION ON
WEB
. IN MY OPINION, I
THINK
THAT DISADVANTAGES OVERTOOK ITS
BENIFITS
AND
EXPLAINS
THE REASON IN COMING PARAGRAPHS.

TO COMMENCE WITH, ONE OF THE ESSENTIAL REASON IS THERE IS BARRIER INTERNET TO SURF.
IN OTHER WORDS
, IT IS
CLEAR
THAT WORLD WIDE
WEB
LIMITLESS DUE TO THE FACT, NEW USER CAN VISIT ANY WEBSITE WHICH, IS NOT SUITABLE FOR THEM.
IN ADDITION
, THE ADVERTISEMENT ON WEBSITES IS NOT
PANELIZED
UNDER ANY BOARD WHICH, SOMETIME BREAKS THE LAW OF THAT REGION.
FOR EXAMPLE
, A YOUNG BOY FROM MALAYSIA LOSES 100 CRORE ON BETTING SITES AS, HE
ASSUME
IT IS VIDEO GAME.
THUS
, THERE IS NO BARRIER ON SURFING THE INTERNET WHICH, LEAD TO FINANCIAL AND MENTAL LOSS IN LONG TERM.

SECONDLY
, THE PIVOTAL DRAWBACK OF INTERNET IS SECURITY ISSUE FOR CIVILIANS. BY THIS I MEAN, THE DATA ON COMPUTER AND SMARTPHONE CAN BE ACCESSIBLE BY THE SOCIAL MEDIA APPS WHICH, INCLINES THE
RISK
OF PRIVACY AS EVERY PERSONAL DETAIL IS AVAILABLE ON
WEB
.
FOR INSTANCE
, THE REGIME OF ENGLAND SECURITY FORCE INFORMATION
IS LEAKED
ON MEDIA PLATFORMS IN CYBER ATTACKS.
AS A RESULT
, THE INFORMATION ON
WEB
IS ALWAYS ON
RISK
TO AS THERE IS NO
SECURANCE
.

TO SUMMARIZE
IT, THE TECHNOLOGY
COMES
WITH VARIOUS BENEFITS IF, IT IS
USED
WITH PROPER KNOWLEDGE IN THE CONTRARY, THE CONS OVERTOOK ITS
ADVANATAGES
AS THERE IS NO RESTRICTION ON WEBSITE FOR SURFING AND THE DATA IS NOT SECURED ON WORLD WIDE
WEB
WHICH, CREATES THE PROBLEM OF MONETARY AND PERSONAL DATA LOSS.
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