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The increase in food production owes much to fertilizers and better machinery,but some people think that it has huge negative impact on human and health of community.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The increase in food production owes much to fertilizers and better machinery, but some people think that it has huge negative impact on human and health of community. P8Yg
It is argued by some individual that large amount of food has been produced due to excessive use of fertilizers and automation. Robots are increasingly use in manufacturing industry. Whilst other opine that use of chemical fertilizers and pesticides will have adverse impact on health. I strongly agree with the statement and believe that chemical will have negative ramification on human health. To embark on, there are several health hazard for human beings as well as it also has effect on environment. Huge amount of food and vegetables are being produced each year, the rate of production is so high due to the fact that harmful chemical insecticides and pesticides are being used in agricultural land. People consume these harmful food that are being grown with the help of fertilizer and this will have negative impact on health of people. In the recent times, large number of people are suffering form harmful disease like cancer, and it is estimated that in coming years more people are likely to die because of deadly disease rather than other diseases. Furthermore, this chemical will also have effect on the gene of parents, consequently, they are likely to give birth to the mutant baby. In addition, there are many fast food industry in the world, which produce junk food by using chemical, and this types of food allured more children, as a result, it will jeopordise the progression and development of children. On the other hand, while some section of society believe that increase in food production enables to feed rising population, and farmers can generate more income, which will rise the living standard of people and decrease the poverty. Also, it create employment opportunities with the countries. Moreover, increasing food production not only assist people to rise living standard, but also helps to increase GDP of country, as a result, country will progress faster. This is because more export of food by nations means more money being imported in country. For instance, India, which produce large quantity of onion and potatoes, export to different countries every years resulting in gaining more profit. In conclusion, we cannot deny the fact that use of fertilizer instead of compost manure increase production, but at the same time it will have more serious problem in health of individual. The advantage of using machine and chemical will make production high, which in turn generate huge income.
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is argued
by
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some
individual that large amount of
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food
has
been produced
due to excessive
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use
of
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fertilizers
and automation. Robots are
increasingly
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use
in manufacturing industry. Whilst other opine that
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use
of
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chemical
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fertilizers
and pesticides will have adverse impact on
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health
. I
strongly
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agree
with the statement and believe that
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chemical
will have
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negative
ramification on human health.

To embark on, there are several
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health
hazard for human beings
as well
as it
also
has effect on environment. Huge amount of
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food
and vegetables are
being produced
each year, the rate of
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production
is
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so
high due to the fact that harmful
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chemical
insecticides and pesticides are being
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used
in agricultural land.
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People
consume these harmful
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food
that are
being grown
with the
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help
of
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fertilizer
and this will have
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negative
impact on
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health
of
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people
. In the recent times, large number of
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people
are suffering form harmful disease like cancer, and it
is estimated
that in coming years more
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people
are likely to
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die
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because
of deadly disease
rather
than other diseases.
Furthermore
, this
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chemical
will
also
have effect on the gene of parents,
consequently
, they are likely to give birth to the mutant baby.
In addition
, there are
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many
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fast
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food
industry in the world, which produce junk
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food
by using
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chemical
, and this types of
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food
allured more children,
as a result
, it will
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jeopordise
the progression and development of children.

On the other hand
, while
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some
section of society believe that increase in
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food
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production
enables to feed rising population, and farmers can generate more income, which will rise the living standard of
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people
and decrease the poverty.
Also
, it
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create
employment opportunities with the
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countries
.
Moreover
, increasing
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food
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production
not
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only
assist
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people
to rise living standard,
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but
also
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helps
to increase GDP of
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country
,
as a result
,
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country
will progress faster. This is
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because
more export of
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food
by nations means more money
being imported
in
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country
.
For instance
, India, which produce large quantity of onion and potatoes, export to
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different
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countries
every
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years
resulting in gaining more profit.

In conclusion
, we cannot deny the fact that
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use
of
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fertilizer
instead
of compost manure increase
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production
,
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but
at the same time it will have more serious problem in
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health
of individual. The advantage of using machine and
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chemical
will
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make
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production
high, which in turn generate huge income.
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IELTS essay The increase in food production owes much to fertilizers and better machinery, but some people think that it has huge negative impact on human and health of community.

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