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The greatest present that you have ever had

The greatest present that you have ever had Q5bNb

This is an interesting topic for me to talk about. You know that I’ve just had my 19th birthday the August. But because of the pandemic, I cannot celebrate my birthday so at first, I was a liitle upset. I cannot hang out with my friends and I cannot also receive present from them because the delivery system is also freezing. So I just had a small meal with my family at that they. But you know that, at the end of the day, my friends sent me an email. At first, I think that was just their wishes to me. But then when I opened that email, I receive two videos. At the first video was about me, they collected my pictures and made a video about my 18th, the second video was about our memories at first year in university and also some confessions that they want to talk to me. When I watched those videos, I was really moving. I think that I’m really lucky to have friends like them and they have been the person who makes my 19th birthday become meaningful.

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