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Some people befi'eve thol oir lrovel should be reslricfed becouse il couses serious pollution ond uses up lhe world's fuel resources. Io whof exfenf do you ogree or disogree?

Some people befi'eve thol oir lrovel should be reslricfed becouse il couses serious pollution ond uses up lhe world's fuel resources. Io whof exfenf do you ogree or disogree? xOGw6
It is irrefutable that air travel causes pollution and uses a lot of fuel, but I disagree that air travel should be restricted. I believe that restricting air travel would solve some problems but would lead to many other problems. At a time when people all over the world worry about the decreasing level of fossil fuels and global warming, it is right to take action to save the planet Earth. However, to simply discourage flights is not the answer. lnternational tourism has become the backbone of many economies of the world. Many countries are earning from tourism. Many people are employed in this industry. Many businesses like hotels and leisure centres are dependent on tourists. So, if we discourage international tourism, it would create new and even worse problems. Many businesses would go broke and many people would be without jobs. Air flight also enables intercultural exchanges between countries. The advent of cheap air fare makes it possible for people the world over to travel regularly, regardless of the purpose of the trip. Therefore, people have the opportunities to learn from different cultures and have a better understanding of countries they used to be unfamiliar with. This, in turn, enhances cultural communications between countries. It is true that air travel consumes oil, but other modes of transportation are also causing pollution and using fuel. Discouraging private cars and encouraging people to use public transport could help save the environmental resources in a big way. Therefore it would be a very unpractical decision to restrict air travel at the cost of people's mobility, or worse, at the cost of the development of the economy. Technology could also be used to produce more environmentally friendly and fuel efficient engines. Summing up, instead of restricting air travel, we should develop more efficient engine that produces more energy output with less fuel and fewer major air pollutants. We should also focus on limiting private vehicles and encouraging public transport
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air
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travel
causes pollution and
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uses
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a lot of
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fuel
,
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but
I disagree that
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air
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travel
should
be restricted
. I believe that restricting
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air
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travel
would solve
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some
problems
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but
would lead to
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many
other

problems.

At a time when
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people
all over the world worry about the decreasing level of fossil
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fuels
and global

warming, it is right to take action to save the planet Earth.
However
, to
simply
discourage flights is not the

answer.
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lnternational
tourism has become the backbone of
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many
economies of the world.
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countries

are earning from tourism.
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people
are employed
in this industry.
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Many
businesses like hotels and

leisure
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centres
are dependent on tourists.
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So
, if we discourage international tourism, it would create new

and even worse problems.
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businesses would go broke and
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many
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people
would be without jobs.

Air flight
also
enables intercultural exchanges between countries. The advent of
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cheap
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air
fare
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makes
it

possible for
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people
the world over to
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travel
regularly
, regardless of the purpose of the trip.
Therefore
,

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people
have the opportunities to learn from
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different
cultures and have a better understanding of

countries they
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used
to be unfamiliar with. This, in turn, enhances cultural communications between

countries.

It is true that
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air
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travel
consumes oil,
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but
other modes of transportation are
also
causing pollution and

using
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fuel
. Discouraging private cars and encouraging
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people
to
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use
public transport could
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help
save the

environmental resources in a
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big
way.
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Therefore
it would be a
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very
unpractical decision to restrict
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air
travel

at the cost of
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people
's mobility, or worse, at the cost of the development of the economy. Technology

could
also
be
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used
to produce more
environmentally
friendly and
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fuel
efficient engines.

Summing up,
instead
of restricting
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air
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travel
, we should develop more efficient engine that produces more

energy output with less
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fuel
and fewer major
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air
pollutants. We should
also
focus on limiting private

vehicles and encouraging public
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transport
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IELTS essay Some people befi'eve thol oir lrovel should be reslricfed becouse il couses serious pollution ond uses up lhe world's fuel resources. Io whof exfenf do you ogree or disogree?

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  American English
6 paragraphs
325 words
5.5
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