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The greatest advantage of the railway transport is that it is the most dependable mode of transport as it is the least affected by weather conditions such as rains, fog etc. compared to other modes of transpor v.1

The greatest advantage of the railway transport is that it is the most dependable mode of transport as it is the least affected by weather conditions such as rains, fog etc. compared to other modes of transpor v. 1
Knowledge is power, increases when it is shared. For many people around the world, the information related to scientific research, business, and academic should be free. While others opine that it is better to keep some data confidential. This essay will discuss both views and it will be include my opinion before a reasonable conclusion. To initiate, information keeps us updated about new inventions in the world. It is a right of a society member, who follows the rules and regulations and wants to serve the nation. Information sharing could give benefits to the society and further make people lives easier. For instance, in medical field how to deal with a pregnant woman, this kind of info help significantly to those people who are living too far from urban areas, where medical emergency  facilities are not available. Moreover, Knowledge about business ideas: likewise, a company, an employer who serves plenty of years to its firm. If he retires and having good source of info's, that he can be shared with other people who deserve this; However, it will be beneficial for the growth of a society. Nevertheless, a refuting point of view is that, a coin has two sides. Same as, data sharing has advantages as well as disadvantages which could be dangerous for an organization. Because it cannot be denied that negative effects occurred when precious instructions shared with the wrong people. Such as, Nuclear physics is the most sensible and shrewd department of any country over the world. When bad people, namely; terrorists gain information about that how to make explosives. Consequently, they will obviously use this for bad purposes. A great loss can be seen by sharing it. And it will be better to keep some information secret. To recapitulate, by sharing data without any of the cost, a Colonize could make life easy for its member. Nonetheless, some information should be confidential for its own value. As far I am concerned that, before sharing any kind of knowledge, its good to observe that how it could be reflected back.
Knowledge is power, increases when it
is shared
. For
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many
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people
around the world, the
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information
related to scientific research, business, and academic should be free.
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While
others opine that it is better to
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keep
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some
data confidential. This essay will discuss both views and it will be
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include
my opinion
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before
a reasonable conclusion.

To initiate,
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information
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keeps
us updated about new inventions in the world. It is a right of a society member,
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who
follows the
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rules
and regulations and wants to serve the nation.
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Information
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sharing
could give benefits to the society and
further
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make
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
lives
easier.

For instance
, in medical field how to deal with a pregnant woman, this kind of info
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help
significantly
to those
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people
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who
are living too far from urban areas, where medical emergency
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facilities are not available.
Moreover
, Knowledge about business
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ideas
:
likewise
, a
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company
, an employer
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who
serves
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plenty
of years to its firm. If he retires and having
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good
source of info's, that he can
be shared
with other
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people
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who
deserve this;
However
, it will be beneficial for the growth of a society.

Nevertheless
, a refuting point of view is that, a coin has two sides. Same as, data
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sharing
has advantages
as well
as disadvantages which could be
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dangerous
for an organization.
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Because
it cannot
be denied
that
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negative
effects occurred when precious instructions shared with the
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wrong
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people
. Such as, Nuclear physics is the most sensible and shrewd department of any country over the world. When
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bad
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people
,
namely
; terrorists gain
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information
about that how to
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make
explosives.
Consequently
, they will
obviously
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use
this for
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bad
purposes. A great loss can be
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seen
by
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sharing
it. And it will be better to
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keep
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some
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information
secret.

To recapitulate, by
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sharing
data without any of the cost,
After 'a', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'Colonize' is correct. If 'Colonize' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
a Colonize
could
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make
life easy for its member. Nonetheless,
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some
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information
should be confidential for its
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own
value. As far I
am concerned
that,
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before
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sharing
any kind of knowledge, its
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good
to observe that how it could
be reflected
back.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay The greatest advantage of the railway transport is that it is the most dependable mode of transport as it is the least affected by weather conditions such as rains, fog etc. compared to other modes of transpor v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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