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The graph below shows the four leading types of farming produce in Mitchford city between 1970-2000. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The graph below shows the four leading types of farming produce in Mitchford city between 1970-2000. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v. 1
People have a good way of life of protecting it is authority, accountability it is perceived by few individuals; however, counter arguers claimed that a layman should have a free for their own resolution. There are dual scene point to be discussed regarding the issue. Prior to my stance, both the opinions are analysed further. Examining the former prospect, the primary factor the supporter would put forward is that government should promote a healthy diet and regular training. This is because nowadays people are well foodie to eat much fast meat so they control on diet for everyday life and go to the gym and lesson. In addition to this there should be more time for sports on school timetables. To explain this administration can increase sports activities as well as physical strength to make people healthy. To cap it all hospitals rely on the government for money and resources. The latter aspect suggests has its respective consideration. To commence with the many young people has grown up on a diet of convenience meal. By this I mean that many people reside in outside the hometown those mainly diet of fast feed and those individuals live in abroad they are eating fast cuisine. Apart from this regular test is essential in maintaining a healthy body. To elaborate this young individuals are every morning lesson and walking regularly or few people not responsible for everyday task. To conclude and give my opinion, I support to the latter prospect. A set of people believe it is responsible for government secure healthy life. Another claimed freedom for their own lifestyle. As administration promote a healthy diet and training; however, young people have grown up on a diet of fast feed.
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People
have a
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good
way of life of protecting it is authority, accountability it
is perceived
by few individuals;
however
, counter arguers claimed that a layman should have a free for their
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own
resolution. There are dual scene point to
be discussed
regarding the issue. Prior to my stance, both the opinions are
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analysed
further
.

Examining the former prospect, the primary factor the supporter would put forward is that
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government
should promote a
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healthy
diet and regular training. This is
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because
nowadays
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people
are well foodie to eat much
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fast
meat
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so
they control on diet for everyday life and go to the gym and lesson.
In addition
to this there should be more time for sports on school timetables. To
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explain
this administration can increase sports activities
as well
as physical strength to
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make
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people
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healthy
. To cap it all hospitals rely on the
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government
for money and resources.

The latter aspect suggests has its respective consideration. To commence with the
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many
young
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people
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has
grown up on a diet of convenience meal. By this I mean that
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many
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people
reside in outside the hometown those
mainly
diet of
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fast
feed and those individuals
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live
in abroad they are eating
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fast
cuisine. Apart from this regular
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
is essential in maintaining a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
body. To elaborate this young individuals are every morning lesson and walking
regularly
or few
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people
not responsible for everyday task.

To conclude
and give my opinion, I support to the latter prospect. A set of
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people
believe it is responsible for
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government
secure
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healthy
life. Another claimed freedom for their
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own
lifestyle. As administration promote a
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healthy
diet and training;
however
, young
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people
have grown up on a diet of
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fast
feed.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the four leading types of farming produce in Mitchford city between 1970-2000. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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