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The graph below shows the amount of wine consumed from 1981 to 2007. Summarise the key features of the chart in approximately

The graph below shows the amount of wine consumed from 1981 to 2007. Summarise the key features of the chart in approximately Kyw63
The percentage of people who drunk wine between 1981 and 2007 were shown by the line graph. Overall, in the chart given, in 1981, the number of people who liked using white wine was the highest, while nobody used champagne. Both the amount of people who consumed white wine and red wine had a downward trends, whereas the figures of people drinking champagne had upward trend Firstly, in 1981, people who enjoyed using white wine was about 141 thousand bottles, that was higher 50 thousand bottles than red wine. In 1986, people who loved consuming white wine was increase 29 thousand bottles than that in 5 years ago. But between 1986 and 2007, white wine was had fell down about 105 thousand bottles, in 2007, white wine just attracted 55 thousand bottles. In 1981, nobody using champagne until 1996, people who enjoyed champagne was just about 15 thousand bottles, but it had a rocketed from 1996 to 2007. In 2007, people loved using champagne was 77 thousand bottles, that was higher 62 thousand bottles than that in 1996. People who love drinking red wine was 90 thousand in 1981, that higher almost doubled in 2007.
The percentage of
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who drunk
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wine
between 1981 and 2007
were shown
by the line graph.

Overall
, in the chart
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given
, in 1981, the number of
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people
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who
liked using
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white
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wine
was the highest, while nobody
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used
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champagne
. Both the amount of
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people
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who
consumed
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white
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wine
and red
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wine
had a downward trends, whereas the figures of
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people
drinking
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champagne
had upward
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trend


Firstly
, in 1981,
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people
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who
enjoyed using
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white
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wine
was about 141 thousand
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bottles
, that was higher 50 thousand
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bottles
than red
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wine
. In 1986,
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people
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who
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loved
consuming
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white
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wine
was increase 29 thousand
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bottles
than that in 5 years ago.
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But
between 1986 and 2007,
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white
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wine
was had
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down about 105 thousand
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bottles
, in 2007,
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white
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wine
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just
attracted 55 thousand
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bottles
. In 1981, nobody using
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champagne
until 1996,
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people
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who
enjoyed
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champagne
was
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just
about 15 thousand
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bottles
,
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but
it had a rocketed from 1996 to 2007. In 2007,
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people
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loved
using
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champagne
was 77 thousand
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bottles
, that was higher 62 thousand
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bottles
than that in 1996.
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People
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who
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love
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drinking


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red
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wine
was 90 thousand in 1981, that higher almost doubled in 2007.
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the amount of wine consumed from 1981 to 2007. Summarise the key features of the chart in approximately

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