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the graph below shows concerns three productions in the forest industry in a European country. The production is timber, pulp, and paper increasing during the years between 1980 to 2000. v.1

the graph below shows concerns three productions in the forest industry in a European country. The production is timber, pulp, and paper increasing during the years between 1980 to 2000. v. 1
Many aspects of our life are now dependent on IT. The activities we perform at home, work, or in free time are dominated by technology. This essay will highlight that there are various advantages of using technology and how it overcomes the few disadvantages. To begin with, the use of technology has become an integral part human life. All the people in the world are now least somewhat dependent on it. Firstly, nowadays it is easy to finish household chores like shopping, paying bills, and even booking a cab all these activities can be done through mobile applications. Moreover, there is a latest trend of work from home started by various companies because of an online working platform like Google cloud. Just by logging into the company’s online software, we can start working from anywhere in the world. With the use of technology, there comes some drawback as people are using a number of different applications we tend to provide our personal details easily. A fraudster can use this information for his personal benefit. One clear example is about online payment security, which is still a big concern of today’s technical age. However, if people are cautious during such transaction’s problems like this can be simply avoided. In conclusion, technology is greatly influencing our lives as we are more and more relying on it from our day to day activities to our job. Despite of having few negative side if people are self-aware, problem associated with technology can be easily tackled as it has eased our life to a greater extend.
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dependent on IT. The activities we perform at home, work, or in free time
are dominated
by
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technology
. This essay will highlight that there are various advantages of using
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technology
and how it overcomes the few disadvantages.

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with, the
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technology
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people
in the world are
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now
least somewhat dependent on it.
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companies
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’s online software, we can
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working from anywhere in the world.

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of
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, there
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applications we tend to provide our personal
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details
easily
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are cautious during such transaction’s problems like this can be
simply
avoided.

In conclusion
,
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is
greatly
influencing our
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lives
as we are more and more relying on it from our
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day to day
activities to our job.
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having few
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negative
side if
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people
are self-aware, problem associated with
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technology
can be
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our life to a greater
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay the graph below shows concerns three productions in the forest industry in a European country. The production is timber, pulp, and paper increasing during the years between 1980 to 2000. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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