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The governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations. with this opinion? jR8gy
Many underdeveloped countries nowadays face serious problems trying to provide their citizens with decent education and health facilities, as well as in other areas like trade. However, I disagree that developed nations ought to support these countries, and think they should try to stand on their own feet instead. It is usually possible for poor countries to raise enough money to overcome their predicaments since the source of their shortcomings is usually deep corruption and domestic mismanagement, which has resulted in their funds being embezzled by dishonest officials and their affairs in areas like education, health and trade run by unqualified authorities. If they are in need of support in such areas, they should first make an effort to eradicate the abovementioned issues before asking for aid from the outside world. Furthermore, the money that the governments of developed countries have belongs to their citizens because it originates from their taxes, customs duties, and national resources. It should therefore be spent on providing better facilities like health centres and universities, and improving business environments for their own citizens, not for people living elsewhere in the world. Some may argue that the decline in living conditions in developing countries could result in the migration of their citizens to developed countries in search of a better life, which involves serious financial and cultural concerns for rich nations. However, public investment in improving border control and defence structures can render these concerns insignificant. In conclusion, I think developed countries should not aid poor countries, as their funds should be invested in the betterment of life for their own citizens. Undeveloped nations can often overcome their shortcomings in commerce, health and education on their own through eliminating corrupt officials and improving their management practices.
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nowadays face serious problems trying to provide their
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with decent education and
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health
facilities,
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as in other areas like trade.
However
, I disagree that
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developed
nations ought to support these
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countries
, and
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they should try to stand on their
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possible for poor
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countries
to raise
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enough
money to overcome their predicaments since the source of their shortcomings is
usually
deep corruption and domestic mismanagement, which has resulted in their funds
being embezzled
by dishonest officials and their affairs in areas like education,
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health
and trade run by unqualified authorities. If they are in need of support in such areas, they should
first
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make
an effort to eradicate the
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abovementioned
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before
asking for aid from the outside world.

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, the money that the
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governments
of
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developed
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countries
have belongs to their
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citizens
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because
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be spent
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health
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centres
and universities, and improving business environments for their
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, not for
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that the decline in living conditions in developing
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countries
could result in the migration of their
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citizens
to
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developed
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countries
in search of a better life, which involves serious financial and cultural concerns for rich nations.
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, public investment in improving border control and
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defence
structures can render these concerns insignificant.

In conclusion
, I
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think
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developed
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countries
should not aid poor
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countries
, as their funds should
be invested
in the betterment of life for their
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own
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citizens
. Undeveloped nations can
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often
overcome their shortcomings in commerce,
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health
and education on their
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own
through eliminating corrupt officials and improving their management practices.

IELTS essay The governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations. with this opinion?

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290 words
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