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The government is planning to overcome their investment in ministries what extent do you agree or disagree

The government is planning to overcome their investment in ministries what extent J0nw5

Until 18th century many world wars have been fought. Which not only damages properties, but also destroy lives of human which put drastic effect on the development of the world. Somehow, hats off to the technology which was established in the beginning of 20th century which makes world the safer place from everything. So, government is planning to overcome the expenditure on military. I disagree with this scenario and reasons shall be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, the statement is not satisfied. First and foremost, reason is a fact the war cannot be stop, instead of reducing expenses the government should provide them with more facilities or trained to live in harsh conditions, so they can be prepared for everything. To boot, they should invest their money to upgrade their weapons like cannons, grenades missiles to use in their upcoming battles to have a victory. In fact the most prominent is to enhance medical facility, so that it can helps helps to heal the cure or can be hospitalize lies to have great treatment. In a nutshell, although world has been developed from recent years, yet we all know that wars have no end, so when the battle government should give 50% of expenditure to army.

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Until
 18th century This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
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You use this word too often, consider replacing it withearthnature
world
 wars have been fought
. Which not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 damages properties, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
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destroy
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lives
 of human which put drastic effect on the development of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withearthnature
world
. Somehow, hats off to the technology which was established
 in the beginning of 20th century which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
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world
 the safer place from everything. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 is planning to overcome the expenditure on military. I disagree with this scenario and reasons shall be discussed
 in the subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with, the statement is not satisfied. First
 and foremost, reason is a fact the war cannot be Consider using a past participle here: "stopped".stopped
stop
, instead
 of reducing expenses the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 should provide them with more facilities or trained to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in harsh conditions, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 they can be prepared
 for everything. To boot, they should invest their money to upgrade their weapons like cannons, grenades missiles to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 in their upcoming battles to have a victory. In fact the most prominent is to enhance medical facility, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that it can The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "help"help
helps
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 to heal the cure or can be Consider using the past participle "hospitalized"?hospitalized
hospitalize
 lies to have great treatment.

In a nutshell, although You use this word too often, consider replacing it withearthnature
world
 has been developed
 from recent years, yet
 we all know that wars have no This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 when the battle This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 should give 50% of expenditure to army. 